Drug Ballad...

[Engivale]

I stand when some of you would you sit,
My fuse is lit and I'm fucked up but I'm used to it,
Clues that fit inside a plot but sought to hide a lot,
Tie a knot to flood your blood and dry the clot,
Buy the pot, get the booze, ... lettin' loose...
I'm gettin' used to bein' ready with my petty revenues...
He said he'd choose the path of the righteous,
Half of him likes this but his bad habits are like fists,
They grab at his right sense and pummel and hit him,
Had fun when he lit 'em but then he was done with the prison,
Someone was risen but was it Jesus or the Sun we envisioned?

I don't wanna get religious, I spit this and drop hints,
Snap! Crackle! Pop --- tense feelings are non-sense...
Concealing the calm winds through the scope of a long lens...
Think of hope when you hear the last note and the song ends...

I tear my skull in two to get a better hold of you,
I owe it to the people who get me and know it's true,
Focus, do --- what you think is right,
The sphnyx is tight but I guess it's time to link the sight;
Incas write and Mayans chart,
I die in part every time I rhyme the start...
Confide in Mark --- Luke, John or Matthew,
Light the spark and do what you have to,
Screw it, be glad, too...

---Shame is what you feel when you quit,
Instead of the pride when you tried but you just couldn't do it..

I sense the intensity and make friends with the enemy,
Empty in the new century's bin where I'm meant to be...
The remedy of this sickness was sip fifths and smoke constantly,
Responsibly don't drive but stay alive for my mom to see,
Ironically I need the validation I get,
For the days I forget that I haven't faced the shit yet..
Basically, Wept - But I'm strong for my bad days,
The 'Live in the Past Phase' and exhibitin' dad's traits...
Givin' in, pathways opened when I smoked and I drank,
I'm hopin to thank God if I see him for the opium and dank,
Soul freed from the main source of its woes and its aches,
Coachin' mistakes from the brain to the emotion it fakes...

I don't wanna get religious, I spit this and drop hints,
Snap! Crackle! Pop --- tense feelings are non-sense...
Concealing the calm winds through the scope of a long lens...
Think of hope when you hear the last note and the song ends...

Spin, spin around, Grin and bound,
Jump and laugh,
Have fun and grasp the moment,
Own it and Run a bath...
Sit, ---reflect--- Admit respect,
For the effect of the drugs
That we love and ---introspect...
My hint is yet to be said blatantly,
Just wait and see,
I dance for the chance to play patiently,
The child is locked inside my vile and rocky hide,
It's taught me why I set my mind free and get sloppy high...





links 2morrow...

[the_origin]

this was dope. I always enjoy reading ur pieces. Good job of bringing a fresh perspective to a used topic. Your rhyme pattern was easy to follow and the whole piece was a nice smooth flow. I can se how it would drop on a track. Your imagery was tight and metaphors on point.

I don't wanna get religious, I spit this and drop hints,
Snap! Crackle! Pop --- tense feelings are non-sense...
Concealing the calm winds through the scope of a long lens...
Think of hope when you hear the last note and the song ends...

hot chorus and probably my favorite lines because IMO it brings together the topic.

other fav lines:

Had fun when he lit 'em but then he was done with the prison,
Someone was risen but was it Jesus or the Sun we envisioned?

The sphnyx is tight but I guess it's time to link the sight;
Incas write and Mayans chart,
I die in part every time I rhyme the start...
Confide in Mark ---

Basically, Wept - But I'm strong for my bad days,
The 'Live in the Past Phase' and exhibitin' dad's traits...

overall good shit

[Mr.Mister]

this was a really good concept and i liked how you put your religious views in it and still made it sound good keep going and i will give you more feed back in the future

[Engivale]

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...ft-368478.html
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...at-368628.html
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...ey-368454.html

thanks for the feed, dudes, there's my links.

[fuzz sartre]

ill. really ill. i didn't really have any major problems with it. nice job, man. 9 or 9.5/10

[Ntalek]

Damn this was dope.

He said he'd choose the path of the righteous,
Half of him likes this but his bad habits are like fists,
They grab at his right sense and pummel and hit him,
Had fun when he lit 'em but then he was done with the prison,
Someone was risen but was it Jesus or the Sun we envisioned?

I don't wanna get religious, I spit this and drop hints,
Snap! Crackle! Pop --- tense feelings are non-sense...
Concealing the calm winds through the scope of a long lens...
Think of hope when you hear the last note and the song ends...

I think that part really set the tone for this collab..these lines had a lot of impact and meaning behind them..and your wording is always supreme...the bad habit's like fist part..I thought was a pretty dope meta..and then the lil chorus type part seemed to spark a bit more reality...

---Shame is what you feel when you quit,
Instead of the pride when you tried but you just couldn't do it..

now that lil part really hit home..it's like realistic irony of some sort..that part made me think about a time when I was heavily into extascy...glad i don't do that shit no more..but damn that lil line was dope..

Ironically I need the validation I get,
For the days I forget that I haven't faced the shit yet..
Basically, Wept - But I'm strong for my bad days,
The 'Live in the Past Phase' and exhibitin' dad's traits...
Givin' in, pathways opened when I smoked and I drank,
I'm hopin to thank God if I see him for the opium and dank,
Soul freed from the main source of its woes and its aches,
Coachin' mistakes from the brain to the emotion it fakes...

fuck..you Eng.....that shit was dope..and I could fucking relate to that part so much..especially the live in the past phase and dad's traits part..that was nice..but the last 2 lines..made me say damn..literally..DAMN!! that shit was so real life...and the ending part was just as strong..a good finish to a real dope piece..

It's not only your flow that makes your pieces so good..it's the damn content..you have a ton of dope lines packed with meaning..and filled with emotion for the reader..damn..Eng..I really liked this piece...shit touched me in a nodagel way...dope drop..and I see what you were saying about staying in the moment..instead of jumping to the next thing that rhymes..thx for the advice...NOM'd..