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    Plastic Martyr (IE Topic)

    Plastic Martyr
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    I believe
    that if I
    wrote with
    razor blades
    that keyed
    your leg,
    and used your
    blood as ink,
    you would pay
    more attention.

    I could take
    a rogue comet
    and re-direct
    it's route
    facing the
    intricate pattern
    of inanimate stars,
    and create a
    constellation
    that would
    mock the shape
    of the yeti
    so you could
    relate with
    our scriptures,
    that so often
    pass you,
    without ever
    the slightest notice.

    I'm just
    a disposable
    plastic martyr,
    that sit's in
    your treasure chest
    forever unnoticed,
    and pondering;
    .
    .
    .

    I've spent too
    much time,
    trying to enter
    a broken
    watch world.
    eye-riding black
    unicorns,
    and God’s vision
    of the sparrow.
    putting a rush
    order in for
    tomorrow…on
    wounded wing.

    Don’ you see me,
    dreaming? Silence
    is…so damn poetic
    of you. What’s
    worse than martyrs,
    poet martyrs,
    with muted illusions
    of grandeur, and
    talking sharpie pens.
    You have taken
    permanent residence
    in paper signatures,
    but I know how
    afraid you are of
    tearing, of rain
    fading, of not
    writing yourself into
    cement. What’s
    gonna happen
    when minds evolve
    to temperatures
    exceeding fahrenheit
    451, where you gonna
    write then. And
    who's gonna know you?

    I am offering my flesh,
    my blood…in memory.
    Transcribe this shelter,
    this Sistine Chapel
    and I will bear you,
    a version of
    word that will
    never end. I am
    eternally-ruled
    for your pilot pen.
    waiting to birth
    crimson prose and
    blue inked children,
    aloud.

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    Re: Plastic Martyr (IE Topic)

    this was a fuckin sick piece. i felt the 2nd half a little more but they were both equally dope. the imagery was fuckin amazing, good enough to get an HoF i believe. the overall creativity captured my intension really quick. a really nice flow which made for a easy read, no struggles. overall this was dope, nothin really negative to say about it.

    rtf
    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...13#post6382913

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    Re: Plastic Martyr (IE Topic)

    Thanks for the nom. I'll get your link right now, before I forget.

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