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    The Life Cycle of Religion

    The Life Cycle of Religion


    The Birth of Religion

    Meet Mr. Memory of memories made by many
    men mighty in their own way led astray & plenty
    dented the fabric- & time relented to enact this
    struggle of faith & will- break the bill of rights till
    it splits- And the man leaves adamant & pissed
    reduced to tears & carnage, we live but so harmless
    so bland yet we act detrimental hand on the harness
    don’t be alarmed it’s just wit losing its bliss by this
    And being recycled till the man calms & hits lists
    of faiths- NON SERVIAM- scrolls riddled & mixed
    jumbled up the originals so he remade the played bits
    of holy books so peaceful warped to promote blitz
    of fanatics to enact hits upon other fanatics so backwards
    lift us & throw us down a spiral bottomless- sacked all
    emotion & truth- Solomon’s ring engraved on my tooth
    so gold & shiny- I became a malfunctioning entity whose
    wisdom departs making me benevolent And a smart foe
    start upon another faith- I lead this race..Ready, start, go!

    Religion grows up…

    Fire & brimstone- requiems by the choir
    they sing alone tired they sink old- wired
    as puppets by thinkers who think upon pulpits
    Of skulls & bones- clones of men in cults- knit
    webs to tighten the stranglehold made by bold
    heroes brash & rebellious- callous & feared told
    tales of hellions- took to gallows hooked fellows
    being raked by hookers with books to sign hellos
    and highs- made sure they sign their fortune & life
    for a moment of pleasure- these men in dire strife
    starving & knifed- tied with cloth- these men honor
    Lies- convert a nought by their cross- a goner
    buried alive- by faith hearing funeral bells so clear
    the procession by his peers leading him so near
    to the fear of ex-dears coming to divorce his worth
    they erase his birth by grazing his forehead- he thirsts
    but the water is used to baptize him first his head bursts
    with ideas- but leered at he maintains his ideals leaned
    back to silently attack the men who attach to demeaned
    vessels- children once so pure so naïve- so brave
    left with distaste in his mouth he moves out the cave
    of lies- the pirates den called faith
    ends it all…he’s gone- remains an atheist in his place

    It grows old…

    Disbeliever so chaste yet mocked & he blasts clocks
    of tick tocks to force the pendulum to rewind lots
    of mistakes and memories- he claims clemencies
    from false idols he libels their idols till deficiently
    constructed belief negates his worth he falls head first
    Lost they remove him- make his hearse run on the thirst
    of needing other Gods- his believers disbelieve- he vanishes
    returns in a new guise, new book new culture- he manages
    to get his believer to believe again- believe till the end
    it will end and until then he’s your faithful friend


    You’re Religion.

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    Re: The Life Cycle of Religion

    ^^^

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    I know I owed you some feed..


    Damn good drop Baron..on of your better pieces I"ve read lately..your wording as always was brillant,well placed..and all together this piece was well planned and thought out..the first part..really drew me in..with the solid emotion..and imagery..but it's like your words place your right there in the moment..while reading you can envision every little detail..you had alot of intellectual moments in this piece..which made the reader stop and think....about some of the things you were conveying..man this shit was just nice..I really enjoyed it..especially when it/religion grew old..you really masked that part in some great imagery..all the components were there..and it's not hard to believe that you are still elevating..because..you just seem to get better and better IMO...nice drop and thankx for the read..NOM'd..

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    Re: The Life Cycle of Religion

    Thanks N.
    Kiss me through the camera lens.
    TNL

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    ^^^Pz.
    Kiss me through the camera lens.
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    Re: The Life Cycle of Religion

    doombot

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    Re: The Life Cycle of Religion

    Interesting the way u took on this, i enjoyed reading, i see you did ya research

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    fuckin awesome, maybe my favorite drop i've seen on the site so far. i aint dickridin, i really liked it. ey if u wanna see another drop about religion check out my drop "intellectual border", i need some feed.

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    Re: The Life Cycle of Religion

    fuckin amazing damn baron its so good to read ur shit i love it amazing flow and imagery and everything tight work dude
    JB!

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    Re: The Life Cycle of Religion

    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...ht-368875.html
    Hit that up, took Cry and I awhile [internet/computer problems] but we finally managed it out.




    When I read this [back when you used it for ss? I believe] I didn't so much like it, mainly because I felt that you use such a similiar concept in every other open mic you write [religion type ish] but I can never ignore how good of a writer you are man. Not going to say I loved it, but I did enjoy it for the most part. Wording was pretty straight. Flowed well with the rhymescheme. Concept, as I said, was something I've seen either done EXACTLY or similiar before. I guess you can say it was a original drop. Not too creative. But the thing I felt kept me reading was how well written it all was. Get some new concepts. . . and I'll hit you up.

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    Re: The Life Cycle of Religion

    i love educated people , and u put words together very well i enjoy reading things that the normal dont write about every one else is sort of on the similar where you up the anti...this some good shit ..PREACH!!

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    Re: The Life Cycle of Religion

    This was dope storywise man..It enlightened me to be honest. It was good reading something that seemed personal, this seemed like it was your opinion on the progression of religion, whether it was or not doesn't matter though as it was a great read. Like I said, the concept was nice and original..Religious drops are your forte man, so obviously you knew how to word your piece here, the syntax was nice, some clever lines. The flow was unique and easy to follow, overall a great drop. Good to see it got NOM'd, at least one of us gets some recognition for their OM work! lol.

    RTF please.
    LOL

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    This was nice. While the flow was iffy to me in a couple of places, you covered all the bases with this shit... like Burden said, it kinda enlightened me. I enjoyed it a lot too.

    O/A: 8.5/10

    Could you RTF?

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