(haiku)
gonna kill myself
this isn't a metaphor
i'm dead serious.
-atti
(haiku)
gonna kill myself
this isn't a metaphor
i'm dead serious.
-atti
Honestly, I'm Not One With A Taste For Haikus, But This Is Kinda Cool,
I Sense A Bit Of Dark Emotion And, I Don't Know If You Meant To Or Not ??, But Also I Found A Lil' Humor In This
Stay Real.
Yeah, I like it. You executed it well. It was simple, yet complex at the same time. I liked how you said this ain't a metaphor then said I'm dead serious. Even though it's not a metaphor, it kind of is, yet at the same time it's oxy-moron...ic! LOL. I don't know what the fuck I'm trying to say. But it was dope. Check mine out when you get some time. It's a haiku as well.
i love haiku,,hehe
life does that to you sometimes
the world seem fucked up to some people sometimes
i always think of suicide, but never realy tried it
o well, hopefully you won't book out yet, & i/we will see/hear a few more of your poems
pz
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kinda cool...
but i dunno... funny little metaphor... honestly ive only read a few haiku's in my life that have impressed me...
smeh... sorta cool.
like legz said... nice execution...
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lmao, nice shit son
rtf
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