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    The Vacant Skies

    Actually the first piece right here i've dropped on RB.......
    Bout time i got back into the process







    Reach into the clouds and reserve a seat
    For when my soul is found and death deicides to greet
    Greivance for the sky won't uphold your chances
    Of entering in time.. Before they close off the mansion
    Lock the doors to the shimmering moon and stars.
    Then stop the force that's entering my soothing bars.
    As letters fell from the horizon, P-O-E-T came together
    I set aside thoughts of violence and tried to clear the weather
    No rainy days with tears.. Only sunbeams drench my face
    Complaining of a change in fears after gaining heavens faith
    A sinner who seen dreams of diseased teens and hates it
    I've won over greed but grief seeps from me like satan
    Once my palms grasp a flask of happiness and smiles
    I'll relax and detach the half that slits and cries for miles
    The sky is vacant as far as our studies show
    And god'll need a replacement once he is able to let go.
    A diamond cluttered canvas, Held between my fingers
    Needs repair from past damage as lost souls linger
    Our ghosts were denied by the sky and walk this planet
    Now their minds are aligned with mine, communication outlandish
    Jibberish was whispered and their vibrations were felt.

    "Hey, Mister! Please.. I'm dead and still need help..
    The sky wasn't vacant and now I live the afterlife with no home
    I'm becoming impatient and I can't write with no light.. So Alone."

    When my time is reached I'll reach for a childs hands to grasp
    I won't step to leave without my sleeve being tugged to the grass
    I'll share the seat I worked for and love every second of it
    Take care of those in need and hope they learn something from it..
    Carry a corpse's outline thru the weather into the past time..
    Answering their cries
    Then hope for one last time that together, intertwined
    We can reach the vacant skies...
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    Re: The Vacant Skies

    I think this is more on a poetry level [Poetic Scriptures] not open mic, but

    I liked it... good detail and story man, I was feeling it. A good read, and good choice of words/vocab, great flow.
    keep'em coming.

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    Re: The Vacant Skies

    Word. Thanx shanks.
    Uppin..................

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    Re: The Vacant Skies

    I read it again duke... not on your jock, but that shit is nice...

    "When my time is reached I'll reach for a childs hands to grasp
    I won't step to leave without my sleeve being tugged to the grass
    I'll share the seat I worked for and love every second of it
    Take care of those in need and hope they learn something from it.."

    I'm in Iraq right now... this got me thinkin bout my daughter.

    thx for the read
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    Re: The Vacant Skies

    Quote Originally Posted by Dirty Shanks View Post
    I read it again duke... not on your jock, but that shit is nice...

    "When my time is reached I'll reach for a childs hands to grasp
    I won't step to leave without my sleeve being tugged to the grass
    I'll share the seat I worked for and love every second of it
    Take care of those in need and hope they learn something from it.."

    I'm in Iraq right now... this got me thinkin bout my daughter.

    thx for the read
    word. No prob.

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    Re: The Vacant Skies

    You certainly capture raw emotion and like an artist draw mental pictures that sink down into the heart. keep up the good shit.

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    You certainly capture raw emotion and like an artist draw mental pictures that sink down into the heart. keep up the good shit.

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    You certainly capture raw emotion and like an artist draw mental pictures that sink down into the heart. keep up the good shit.

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    You certainly capture raw emotion and like an artist draw mental pictures that sink down into the heart. keep up the good shit.

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    You certainly capture raw emotion and like an artist draw mental pictures that sink down into the heart. keep up the good shit.

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    You certainly capture raw emotion and like an artist draw mental pictures that sink down into the heart. keep up the good shit.

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    this was a very intresting post i liked it especially the emotion of happyness you brought into it

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    Re: The Vacant Skies

    Word.....
    Can somebody give me some deeper feed??

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