Spekz. VS HighEngineChief

[Spekz.]

30 Lines
Regular Rules
Due 48 hours
Free Verse

dont forget to add links - Ntalek

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[Spekz.]

Check In
Best of luck .

[HighEngineChief]

Ya G'luck man,
check

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show....html?t=364129

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[HighEngineChief]

It Was All a Dream
Written By
HighEngineChief

Bottomless Hunger
That's all that could describe
The feeling
A charade of
Endless possibilities

My young eyes lit up at the hue
Faded green brushing against
My impressionable mind
Staining my aspirations with
Lust, a shallow addiction

No wonder this land is wasted

We prefer our presidents dead

This little light of mine
Inked cotton, shining through
Into the dark, oblivion
Painting the walls of hell
Green

The allure of it all
Potent melancholy
The harsh scent of black ink
And rough idolized fiber
The blasphemy of our survival
All my dreams,
Printed and Signed

A HigherPower!
A tangible,
HigherPower!

Such viscous influence
Piercing eye of
Judgement

Money, Money, Money

I need you shamelessly
Feed me your wonderful lies
Burry me in a dream
That what i put my faith in
Is the answer
I've been looking for

[Spekz.]

Destination Cool
By:Spekz.

Plastered Regrets sign permanence,
As sour tastes prune leftover happiness.
Hunger screams by its clenched bud
Feeling starved im filled with nonsense
A scent often pasted to my passive life
Rocking in the dark, a mirror reflects
Captive smiles suddenly chained down
Writings hooks, catching pouted lips.
Aging what ifs, boil in the presence
Questioning constant revolutions
Stem from unanswered roots
Of a haunted, once lived existence.

I didn’t sign up to be rejected…
…I just wanted to be cool!


I knelt before a king once
He sat throned at my highschool prom
Obviously I bowed for advice,
And he spoke.
Cool is rare, so inhale death
Shoot the pain with shots
Burning pits tell the stomach
Its tough – but It likes that.
Fear is no match for a life
Written by prescription
so pop an instant rise
or withdrawls remove the cool.

Laughing in response
My knees pick my dignity up
But forget my common sense
Now simpy broke – I just want popular “friends”

So, Sipping on self remorse
Regurgitating pity, I ignite my final dues
A small fire lights up my life
One addictive minute surges
As I inhale the cool
We digress..
Buried with droned friends
As I now ash my remains,
At heavens gate I approach
A familiar throne to ask…
Hows popularity now?

[Spekz.]

Upping

Drop Links .

[Ntalek]

Damn good battle here...I'm putting this in HOF battles.

H.E.C.-damn you had a witty way of wording things in your poem that kinda made it a bit abstract as far as the way you convey your message..I thought that your mechanics were on point in this one..and overall a very good read..nice drop...

Spekz- Damn. now your drop on the other hand seemed to have that extra notch of creativity I was looking for..I'd say that you guys were tied on the overall mechanics of a poem..but you basically won me over with enjoyment..the enjoyment factor of your poem was high...really high..so nice shit..

V- Spekz.

[Spekz.]

Upping Hoe-Cakes! .

[Alluminati]

Very good battle, HEC i thought your wording was nice, it had good emotion and and i thought your descriptions were very good with an overall good piece on a very good concept. Spekz i thought yours was on the same level as HEC's with a little extra, yours just wow'd me that bit more, it was more enjoyable, better emotion and your precision i thought was just slightly better aswell. Overall great battle guys.

Hit : Alluminati vs 3x

[Soule]

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...vs-366548.html
Dante vs Sharp. Dope poetry battle if you ask me.


I don't know, really close battle to be all honest. Wording was really well put by both writers here. Guess that Spekz, ended up having the stronger emotion. But other then that, both did really good and had a close bout. Imagery was really vivid within the two. And in the end of the day, I actually enjoyed both concepts quite a bit. But, spekz picked his emotion attachments just a hair more. enjoyed this a lot guys, keep at it.

Vote/ Spekz
Reason: More Emotional

[Neruda II]

Chief, I think you had a pretty good verse. I think some of the wording could have been more creative though, try to avoid words that are used all the time in poetry. "Melancholy" "Emotion" "Feel" "tears" "depression", you know, that kind of stuff which people expect from poetry. You came too straightforward with your verse, but it was some real shit, I felt you had some conviction behind your lines. I think with a bit more time spent, you would have had the winning verse.

Spekz, I liked a lot of your wording. I'm not familiar with your work but I believe you have a lot of promise. Your metaphors and such are very reminiscent of a younger me, I like that. I hope to read more from you since you did a great job with your imagery and the more technical aspects of writing.

V/spekz