Yah I do it jus to piss fagets like u off,lol....
Yah I do it jus to piss fagets like u off,lol....
Your poetry sucks dick. It's hated for a reason, it's so fucking bad.Originally Posted by Itz2EZ
Ha Ha, fuk all u haterz
suk dick....
stop freeposting in my poem
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Youth Of The Nation-P.O.D.
Anywho, a nice little acrostic poem. Though I was disappointed with the ending and uh the best aspect was Emotion, nothing special, it didn't wow me, but it was the only good thing that came out of your poem IMO. Though, I will say the creative Scheme was good. The Weak Aspect, I just felt your lines was forced, I.E. in the second Stanza. I don't know if it was a run-on sentence nor just a sentence because there wasn't any periods at the end so I guess it's a run on sentence. I just felt the lines was forced, didn't really meshed well with the second line and afterwards. It just didn't flow well. Overall this was a Good Little Poem.
And...Poems don't have to rhyme but they do need a 'scheme'. Without it, your poem just doesn't flow well. It could be anything from rhyming to syllable counts.
Cheers.
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thanks beautiful.
I liked this, it was short and simple but you got your point across and made a pretty vivid metaphore, I liked the suicide note line, subtle comparrisons like that are always effective and leave the reader with a clever smirk, and probably didn't even relized it. Not the best I've seen from you but it was a nice read all together.
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