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    Forgiven.

    Forgiven
    Written by Pique


    Screaming his name in vain
    daddy has caused me pain
    having so many nightmares
    yet I've never seen his face.

    Growing up is beyond difficult
    not knowing who he is,
    the topic has no real input
    and ulcers are my end result.

    Gazing into the mail today
    a letter made me pass away
    it was written by my father
    so much he has to say.

    Spending an entire summer
    with him; bruiser of the mother
    to make it a pain on his side,
    greeting him to the hate I cover.

    Weeks journey by like minutes
    feebleminded still being unforgiven
    someday, the mood will change
    today, he's emotionally smitten.

    I felt remorse this morning
    as he was down mourning
    feeling a bit of sympathy
    tears don't rain; it's pouring.

    So months are spent together
    managing to elevate the weather
    he's actually a fantastic sole
    when his mood is much better.

    The last day of summer has come
    almost ready to see the rising sun
    though he lies on the bed; white
    and his pulse appears a bit numb.

    I sit at the bedside speaking
    pretending he's still breathing
    but I can't hold it back anymore
    and I can't bother with leaving.

    Preachers showed up with much praise
    somehow the word drifted like parades
    and once the funeral began it's session
    remember the past; this is my masquerade.

    Through rivers of denial, pity and sorrow
    knowing this will be my thoughts tomorrow
    I love you dad, sorry that I misunderstood
    because you're footsteps are worth my follow!

    Before I leave this cemetery without say
    I leave that letter on top of your grave
    the one you wrote me, asking forgiveness
    today, father please don't be so afraid.

    No longer a sinner, no longer smitten
    and on that letter, I now have written
    in the afterlife, we'll laugh once again
    because father, you've been forgiven.

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    Re: Forgiven.

    I felt remorse this morning
    as he was down mourning
    feeling a bit of sympathy
    tears don't rain; it's pouring.
    Wow, fucking dope imo. I dont read much poetry so maybe thats why I think it's so great, but this was awesome, it got me into wanting to learn poetry. It was sucha smooth ride and was deep as hell. You made the words come to life and seem so real. This was a great piece man. HOF worthy imo.
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    Re: Forgiven.

    Thanks man, link me if you ever tryout poetry.

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    Re: Forgiven.

    Big Up

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    Re: Forgiven.

    drop links, not z's.

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    Re: Forgiven.

    wow, this poem captured my attention in the first two lines and it never waivered away.
    this was by far my favourite line:

    Weeks journey by like minutes
    feebleminded still being unforgiven

    and it all flowed so perfectly together i just loved it. the imagery could have been a little better, but the wording and flow was all amazing i don't think im even good enough to post a poem if all these are this amazing.

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    Re: Forgiven.

    thankyou friend.

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