Little Devil

[Soul Slayer]

Little Devil


Shunning all human company
To absorb the envy off the walls
Fascinated by a symphony
That is grim like the fall
It is only audible to him
.
.
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Bathing his soul in funk
Evil incarnate, hiding behind an innocent soul
But jealousy is engraved on his face
If you look deep enough you see the decay
.
How could this be?
.

Sinister intent sipping
through his pitch black eyes
Contemplating another act of sin
Pregnant with ideas, he begins to grin
Buying precious time before resurrecting hell
.
Cunning and Deceitful
.
Its been a thousand years
Since Lucifer roamed these lands
Now.. The realms of hell are open again
Back to nature his flame of pain
Free at last from the lucid chains
Lurking at night with methods colder
Spiritual unrest settles upon my sholders
Coz the devil could be right next to me
and i wouldn't even know what hit me.

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[Soul Slayer]

Uppin......

[Cody Nash]

odd piece. the ending threw me off. I couldn't tell if you're saying the kid is the devil, or the rubby ducky is the devil, or perhaps both are of devilish features? dunno... it was kind've crazy off the way as far as descriptive points in that area goes... your poetry is getting noticeably better though. the line where you said "Pregnant with ideas" that was a powerful phrase right there. I've never read anything like that, and it was definitely poetic and a dope highlight in the verse... only issue I got with your writing is the wording in a few areas and the way you put together a storyline. because the originality and dopeness of a storyline definitely effects the piece and emotion in itself. keep writing bro...



- Nash




got a new piece up in PS... called "The Other Side"... hit that shit up.

[Soul Slayer]

Thanks Nash i'll hit that up