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    The Other Side

    The Other Side
    By: Cry






    Ever wonder...
    why mom use to call you "monkey man"
    as curious george is on the television?
    while after time passes by, in the kitchen
    you're sticky of glue with honey and...
    improvising with an adolescance -
    still shy of arriving to your breathless,
    remarkable remembrance.
    "You want some too, mommy?"
    completely pure in essance...
    you're careless of anger, yearning intution.
    still sitting in the kitchen, all smiles...
    while she's trying to be forcefully angry
    but can't in your embrace. strangely.
    she hugs you in spite of the glue's texture,
    yet inside, feels the honey's sweetness
    followed by a cheek kiss's happy gesture.
    and all of this was appreciation's
    whisking texture.

    More than a cornerstone in life...

    it's pleasure's amazement...
    but not the dirty kind, you're still pure, it's
    only the realest feeling of atonement.
    the kind you need to own it... that moment
    in time when food never tasted, but if it
    was labeled sweet then that's what it was.
    a time when you were faceless.

    But enough of that, back to the basics...

    back to the abode's room of food,
    you're only two - mom and you...
    not speaking of age because it's only a number
    and you're blood lovers here, both smiling and
    holding each other. the talk of the town -
    the town being your home, while talk's played by
    every opinionator who enters the house.

    Reaching the point...

    as a boy...
    remember adolescence's peak point?
    dig through memory if that's a no,
    and really reach for it. before it takes
    hold on a distant thought and leaves
    your mind directly from the ears.
    remember... mother on the floor
    ravenously joyous, smiling her tears
    (because if she cried them, she'd be sad)
    leaving your brain jeered. expressing it
    with glorious confusion and outcry...

    "Mommy, why do you cry?"

    feeling odd of everything taught
    about these tears from her eyes.
    because with its disguise it was
    registered as sad, and that was B-A-D,
    which connected with misbehaving.
    driven crazy, you had to ask the lady.

    Getting right down to it...

    this might sound foolish, but a mother
    is the caretaker. a heart to your soul.
    she teaches what's not told
    while you just listen. but this time
    she listened from kitchen tiles. glue
    fingers and all, she held that hand after
    your questioning of water droplets.
    what she did next was spoken lightly,
    but still highly. her voice wasn't dry -
    and she spoke it clearly...

    "It's because I love you Honey...
    all because I love you."


    cry as she might,
    love rained from her eyes.
    and from then on...
    you knew what it was like
    to be feeling the feeling
    revealed from disguise,
    locked deep down...
    .
    .
    .
    inside the other side.





    pz.
    love your mothers.

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    Re: The Other Side



    This piece was one good read..and you were right If I read this to my mother she'd bust out in tears...so great job on the content..the emotion was evident..and the overall storyline was dope...you had some nice meta's here and there..that really helped give off some imagery...The topic you went with had me a bit shakey in the beginning but as I read on it began to clear up..and fit in a bit more..overall this was a good read...my momz birthday is tuesday..would you mind if I printed this up..put it in a frame and give it to her...I'm serious..I'll have you as the author though...like By: Cry/Nash..or w/e you'd like me to put...but I think I'd like to do that...anywho..nice shit..my dude..and no 'wish I may hasn't been nom'd..for some odd reason!!

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    Re: The Other Side

    yeppers... go for it...

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    Re: The Other Side

    feed please? one of my best yet. c'mon...

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    Re: The Other Side

    Sorry for the late feed my dude but I've kept my word.
    This poem is great Nash. It makes me think of all the
    sacrifices that our momz make for us and the lengths
    at which they go to protect us from everything bad.
    Emotion was very high on this poem maybe it was
    personal for you? Ionno and the imagery was definately
    there very vivid as well. I liked this a lot and Is the best
    I've seen from you in the poetry scenes. Thanks for the read

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    Re: The Other Side

    Really gripping. You made me feel something that I don't feel much when I feel poetry and that's "want", I really wanted to read this poem. I wanted to finish it, I wanted to learn from this and take something away from it. I think you have a great talent for the voice of your own poetry. You talked directly to the reader which can be a powerful tool if used right, and you did it excellently. I think this poem had a lot of fluff, but even the fluff seemed needed in this piece. I thought this was rather refreshing and moving. Great work here.
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    I liked this, bro. Really brought back some memories and to be honest it almost made me sad at the thought of one day losing my own mother. The imagery and descriptiveness was just so beautiful that it really hit home. The flow was great and it made me really want to finish, it gripped me. I will be NOMing this. By the way, return the feed.
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    Re: The Other Side

    thanks dogs.

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    Fuck man, this sucks. My mom almost died last week, why you gotta hate? LOL. JK, but this mad dope. Mixed with some real emotion that I felt in my life recently, and the images you painted were awesome. You did a good job on this piece, probably your best poem I've read yet, but I'm sure there's better, I haven't seen enough yet. I loved this man and I don't know...just this hit me pretty well...I really got into it. Cool shit Cry - thanks for realizing my pain.
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    Re: The Other Side

    spank you.

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    I have always, ALWAYS underestimated your poetry skills until now. This piece, for me, really touched home man. Very sensitive, it makes me want to go give my mom a hug right now. Also, as a poem itself, it really grabbed my attention, sucked me in, and left me wanting more. There is no reason that this shouldn't be HoF. Good Job!

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    Re: The Other Side

    I'll get that tonight.

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    Re: The Other Side

    This was a great read, I think you really hit the nail on the head with this piece. You brought a good deal of imagery despite not using a whole lot of adjectives to compliment your piece, which is pretty difficult to do. I also liked the fact that this is one of the few pieces you ever see that has a happy ending - way to switch it up lol. I liked your writing style, reminds me of myself. Lastly, I liked the way that you made this as long as you did. You could have gotten right to the point but it would have taken so much away from it. The fact that it dragged out abit added to the piece because you were able to properly describe the scenario and play with the reader's emotions more than normal. Good work bro.

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