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    The Jaws of the Beast

    This doesn't really rhyme at points, but rhymes at others.. it's all coincidence..
    and is really inconsequential to the poem/story



    they say leave the luggage at home for a trip through the jaws of the beast
    for an occasion such as this it's best to pack light
    it's said the path to perdition is a long if not lonely one
    but the sad yet powerful truth is companionship is out of the question
    I've heard it spoken that a walk to the gallows can last a lifetime
    and you won't even realize it until you've reached your destination
    yet some still maintain there lively gait, the woe of paradox
    that vibrant swagger contradicts the events soon to take place
    ponder the intention behind each step, fighting back the urge to fight back
    imagine the helplessness of a hopeless situation
    see the memories long forgotten that stream before soon expired eyes
    experience the pain that binds itself with expectation
    view the headsman's stained fingers
    ...and perhaps contemplate...
    the ache he feels for you, sealed behind his mask of a face
    listen to your heartbeat,
    the dull thrum singing time from the depths of your throat
    and rehearse to yourself, again, the last words that you'll ever speak
    absorb the sensation of rope entwined with neck,
    ...along with the anxious pulse of an unwelcome audience...
    now match the lifeless stare of your executioner
    question the worth of an apology, the weight of your remorse
    and then gulp down another breath and just ...wait...
    stay silent when they bid you speak, words are worthless and unimportant
    just flash a sad smile and hope the impact settles in
    and when the air rushes past your feet, mussing your hair for the last time
    don't struggle, because either way, gravity will see the job complete

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    Re: The Jaws of the Beast

    Tsek!! I'll leave feed later

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    Re: The Jaws of the Beast

    Damn.. You Made It Seem Sooo Sad Which It Is I Think You Did A Great Job

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    Re: The Jaws of the Beast

    Damn, split... nice shit actually.

    I saw the structure and was thinking, 'the fuck is this?'... started reading and i realized you had a far greater vocab than I had thought... & when I got to the end, you left me like... 'why the fuck doesn't he write more often'.

    DEEP shit, loved it.. one of the best things i've ever read from you. nice shit..
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    Re: The Jaws of the Beast

    Quote Originally Posted by DJ_SILK View Post
    Damn.. You Made It Seem Sooo Sad Which It Is I Think You Did A Great Job
    Shut up fool!!

    Back to the matter at hand. This was really nice, it had some powerful vocab.
    I like the way you played around with your words. Coz it really got
    me thinkin and was more of a creative poem as far as i think. This was the first of your work that i've seen and i'm thinkin you must be a great topical head.
    Why not try out IE as well. Anyways great work en keep it comin.
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    Re: The Jaws of the Beast

    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...html?p=6282541

    Nice piece man. Some of the wording seemed like it could have been a bit better as far as choosing it goes. But it was still nice. Flow was pretty well set and nothing short of fluent. Your emotion was really something man, you really had the touch of what it's like to be in this situation. Imagery was pretty cool, and a nice storytell. Keep writing man. Return the favor, please?

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    Re: The Jaws of the Beast

    word.. I'll get to that in a minute.

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    Re: The Jaws of the Beast

    up.

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