Welcome to the new season of LLL J.R. Most of you should know the rules already, but if you don't here are the rules:
Check in by Wednesday
Verse due by Friday at 12:00 EASTERN.
10 lines MIN , 20 lines MAX.
See rule thread and go over the rules if your unsure.
Always Impervious an Axis Power.
Supermod Me.
Last edited by Slowhands; March 15th, 2008 at 01:26 PM
check..
12 lines good?
kid long awaits a win. but everyone knows i have no patients
so if your what the doc ordered. we all overdosed on played shit
i'm goin places. no for real yo. cause i'm LLL bound in a week
but face it junior. Amend has always been out of your league
poundin this geek. kids a thug? who let this tyke in the game
cause only time he ever busted caps. ...he was TyPiN his name
a prize fighter. thats lame. everyone knows this dogs a joke
and a more walk in the park ...then if i brought a ball n rope
get mauled n choked. n just straight beat the fuck out of dude
and then it hits him ...that we're all still waitin for talent to
kid your bound to lose, its nothing new for me to drop Solid b
cause we know your sorry, n we aint even talkin' apologies
blah blah blah blah blah ...cause imma cocky son of a bitch
the sad part is my verse still has 14 more punches than his
Last edited by Slowhands; March 11th, 2008 at 01:58 PM
ehh..
i'll pummel your face, mug knock'd off your shoulder
you'll think it's a fuck'n recession..runnng forclosure
bitch it's over, fuck your title, you' get KeyALived
like the votes in your last FL battle, i'll 'collect all 5'
you won't survive..you get disrespected on the daily
clown..did'nt know it would be comical to beet'le Baily
blah..that's all i got to say, there's no vet wack as you
kid so funny lookin, thought u was half man, half rascal
i'm a blast dude, my heart's pumping, bitch you weak
get your heart stomp...
.....cuz like a pendrop, u won't hear a beat
fuck A'mend joy, u a nutcase, i'l make your life hectic
cuz when i hand u an L, it'll to be hard to accept it
-12
...no votes yet, i'll drop another bar on your ass
let your feeblemind know, u weight out my class
Last edited by CatasTrophy; March 14th, 2008 at 11:36 PM
kid long awaits a win. but everyone knows i have no patients
so if your what the doc ordered. we all overdosed on played shit
played'...
i'm goin places. no for real yo. cause i'm LLL bound in a week
but face it junior. Amend has always been out of your league
nah...
poundin this geek. kids a thug? who let this tyke in the game
cause only time he ever busted caps. ...he was TyPiN his name
ok
a prize fighter. thats lame. everyone knows this dogs a joke
and a more walk in the park ...then if i brought a ball n rope
nah
get mauled n choked. n just straight beat the fuck out of dude
and then it hits him ...that we're all still waitin for talent to
ok decent...
kid your bound to lose, its nothing new for me to drop Solid b
cause we know your sorry, n we aint even talkin' apologies
decent.
blah blah blah blah blah ...cause imma cocky son of a bitch
the sad part is my verse still has 14 more punches than his
meh
vs.
i'll pummel your face, mug knock'd off your shoulder
you'll think it's a fuck'n recession..runnng forclosure
ha ok
bitch it's over, fuck your title, you' get KeyALived
like the votes in your last FL battle, i'll 'collect all 5'
decent personal
you won't survive..you get disrespected on the daily
clown..did'nt know it would be comical to beet'le Baily
meh wording...ok concept
blah..that's all i got to say, there's no vet wack as you
kid so funny lookin, thought u was half man, half rascal
ok
i'm a blast dude, my heart's pumping, bitch you weak
get your heart stomp...
.....cuz like a pendrop, u won't hear a beat
meh
fuck A'mend joy, u a nutcase, i'l make your life hectic
cuz when i hand u an L, it'll to be hard to accept it
ok
*Amend seemed to come a little cocky and I found sum of his punches plain weaker...Solid had alot more attempts if not more creative punches...Amend flipped the same idea and concept into two different punches which wuz witty but yo that wuz a buzz kill'...sumthin' new erytime wuld be nice...unless u continuin off another punch...
V/SolidClipz
Heaven's Guardians Of True Hip-Hop
poundin this geek. kids a thug? who let this tyke in the game
cause only time he ever busted caps. ...he was TyPiN his name
a prize fighter. thats lame. everyone knows this dogs a joke
and a more walk in the park ...then if i brought a ball n rope
vs
nothing
amend took this
v/amend
i'll pummel your face, mug knock'd off your shoulder
you'll think it's a fuck'n recession..running forclosure
creative opener punch.
bitch it's over, fuck your title, you' get KeyALived
like the votes in your last FL battle, i'll 'collect all 5'
wow.......dope punch.
you won't survive..you get disrespected on the daily
clown..did'nt know it would be comical to beet'le Baily
okayy punch.
blah..that's all i got to say, there's no vet wack as you
kid so funny lookin, thought u was half man, half rascal
nah weak punch.
i'm a blast dude, my heart's pumping, bitch you weak
get your heart stomp...
.....cuz like a pendrop, u won't hear a beat
no.
fuck A'mend joy, u a nutcase, i'l make your life hectic
cuz when i hand u an L, it'll to be hard to accept it
WHAT?......NO.
..no votes yet, i'll drop another bar on your ass
let your feeblemind know, u weight out my class
HAHA,,,,,liked that.
Vs.
kid long awaits a win. but everyone knows i have no patients
so if your what the doc ordered. we all overdosed on played shit
nice opener....harsh punch.
i'm goin places. no for real yo. cause i'm LLL bound in a week
but face it junior. Amend has always been out of your league
wow...nice punch.
poundin this geek. kids a thug? who let this tyke in the game
cause only time he ever busted caps. ...he was TyPiN his name
haha......nice nameplay man/
a prize fighter. thats lame. everyone knows this dogs a joke
and a more walk in the park ...then if i brought a ball n rope
niceness.
get mauled n choked. n just straight beat the fuck out of dude
and then it hits him ...that we're all still waitin for talent to
WHAT?....NO.
kid your bound to lose, its nothing new for me to drop Solid b
cause we know your sorry, n we aint even talkin' apologies
okay filler.
blah blah blah blah blah ...cause imma cocky son of a bitch
the sad part is my verse still has 14 more punches than his
wow.......dope personal punch.
V/ Amend for dropping harsher....he had better personals and nameplays also.
good battle to both.
kid long awaits a win. but everyone knows i have no patients
so if your what the doc ordered. we all overdosed on played shit
nah.. kinda predictable / overdone.
i'm goin places. no for real yo. cause i'm LLL bound in a week
but face it junior. Amend has always been out of your league
kinda self glory.. i see where u were going, but didnt work for me.
poundin this geek. kids a thug? who let this tyke in the game
cause only time he ever busted caps. ...he was TyPiN his name
heh okay, decent.
a prize fighter. thats lame. everyone knows this dogs a joke
and a more walk in the park ...then if i brought a ball n rope
rewording to make it harsher. mehhish overall.
get mauled n choked. n just straight beat the fuck out of dude
and then it hits him ...that we're all still waitin for talent to
nah
kid your bound to lose, its nothing new for me to drop Solid b
cause we know your sorry, n we aint even talkin' apologies
ight not bad.
blah blah blah blah blah ...cause imma cocky son of a bitch
the sad part is my verse still has 14 more punches than his
nah mann.
vs
i'll pummel your face, mug knock'd off your shoulder
you'll think it's a fuck'n recession..runnng forclosure
decent w/p, punch was aight.
bitch it's over, fuck your title, you' get KeyALived
like the votes in your last FL battle, i'll 'collect all 5'
eh not feelin this one mann.
you won't survive..you get disrespected on the daily
clown..did'nt know it would be comical to beet'le Baily
this came across kinda forced..
blah..that's all i got to say, there's no vet wack as you
kid so funny lookin, thought u was half man, half rascal
nah
i'm a blast dude, my heart's pumping, bitch you weak
get your heart stomp...
.....cuz like a pendrop, u won't hear a beat
mehh, pretty simple.
fuck A'mend joy, u a nutcase, i'l make your life hectic
cuz when i hand u an L, it'll to be hard to accept it
uhh. okay
...no votes yet, i'll drop another bar on your ass
let your feeblemind know, u weight out my class
again, not really feelin..
well overall, not that great of a battle, but i gotta go with Amend for having a couple decent punches, compared to solid, who had alot of punches with potential, but fell off with wording or lack of wit/creativity.
v. amend
fuck you..your vote doesnt count anyway asshole.Originally Posted by PhuQue
what kind of explanation is that...i had some punches faggot!
actually... my vote does count as Im in the real league...
so dont sway.
Amend - I liked your verse overall. You had two or three lines that were weak and coulve been a lot better. but overall your verse was pretty good. i actually liked the opener the best out of your verse. the rest was good but nothing great.
Solid - Just like amend, i liked the opener but the rest of the verse wasnt as good. All your other punches were ok, but i didnt like the rascal one at all. your seemed like you had the right idea, but took it in the wrong direction.
v/ amend
kid long awaits a win. but everyone knows i have no patients
so if your what the doc ordered. we all overdosed on played shit
lol, simple though
i'm goin places. no for real yo. cause i'm LLL bound in a week
but face it junior. Amend has always been out of your league
na, again too simple
poundin this geek. kids a thug? who let this tyke in the game
cause only time he ever busted caps. ...he was TyPiN his name
lmao.. played, but you worded it funny
a prize fighter. thats lame. everyone knows this dogs a joke
and a more walk in the park ...then if i brought a ball n rope
eh
get mauled n choked. n just straight beat the fuck out of dude
and then it hits him ...that we're all still waitin for talent to
na
kid your bound to lose, its nothing new for me to drop Solid b
cause we know your sorry, n we aint even talkin' apologies
lol, played though
blah blah blah blah blah ...cause imma cocky son of a bitch
the sad part is my verse still has 14 more punches than his
literally a filler... you always need to end with a strong punch dude..
lil more elevatin u'll be in LLL with us... you just need to be more witty and drop these played concepts you usin. get a lil more clever, word that shit to hit its stronger.
vs...
i'll pummel your face, mug knock'd off your shoulder
you'll think it's a fuck'n recession..runnng forclosure
lmao
bitch it's over, fuck your title, you' get KeyALived
like the votes in your last FL battle, i'll 'collect all 5'
eh, decent
you won't survive..you get disrespected on the daily
clown..did'nt know it would be comical to beet'le Baily
eh
blah..that's all i got to say, there's no vet wack as you
kid so funny lookin, thought u was half man, half rascal
na
i'm a blast dude, my heart's pumping, bitch you weak
get your heart stomp...
.....cuz like a pendrop, u won't hear a beat
na
fuck A'mend joy, u a nutcase, i'l make your life hectic
cuz when i hand u an L, it'll to be hard to accept it
na
you started off nice, but FELL OFF after that lol. pretty horrible towards the end man. definitly need better concepts and wording. long way to go before i see you in LLL.
vote - Amend
kid long awaits a win. but everyone knows i have no patients
so if your what the doc ordered. we all overdosed on played shit
played
i'm goin places. no for real yo. cause i'm LLL bound in a week
but face it junior. Amend has always been out of your league
lol, nice flip.
poundin this geek. kids a thug? who let this tyke in the game
cause only time he ever busted caps. ...he was TyPiN his name
nah, concepts played.
a prize fighter. thats lame. everyone knows this dogs a joke
and a more walk in the park ...then if i brought a ball n rope
again, this concepts been done to death, and better.
get mauled n choked. n just straight beat the fuck out of dude
and then it hits him ...that we're all still waitin for talent to
not feelin the wording. punch is eh at best
kid your bound to lose, its nothing new for me to drop Solid b
cause we know your sorry, n we aint even talkin' apologies
played
blah blah blah blah blah ...cause imma cocky son of a bitch
the sad part is my verse still has 14 more punches than his
ok
i'll pummel your face, mug knock'd off your shoulder
you'll think it's a fuck'n recession..runnng forclosure
nah. the wordplays off.
bitch it's over, fuck your title, you' get KeyALived
like the votes in your last FL battle, i'll 'collect all 5'
ok
you won't survive..you get disrespected on the daily
clown..did'nt know it would be comical to beet'le Baily
again, doesnt really connect
blah..that's all i got to say, there's no vet wack as you
kid so funny lookin, thought u was half man, half rascal
no
i'm a blast dude, my heart's pumping, bitch you weak
get your heart stomp...
.....cuz like a pendrop, u won't hear a beat
nah, too obvious
fuck A'mend joy, u a nutcase, i'l make your life hectic
cuz when i hand u an L, it'll to be hard to accept it
setup nameplays too forced and the punch is weak
-12
...no votes yet, i'll drop another bar on your ass
let your feeblemind know, u weight out my class
hell no
blackeloheimannunakirap
i'm goin places. no for real yo. cause i'm LLL bound in a week
but face it junior. Amend has always been out of your league
vs.
i'll pummel your face, mug knock'd off your shoulder
you'll think it's a fuck'n recession..runnng forclosure
.
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clipz started out wit a good bar, but after that his consistency fell...he had nothing but fillers, & nothing else hard hittin & lacked sum good wordin on sum potential bars...amend came off hard & kept hittin his opponent, sum lines were rocky & sum were pretty good...creativity b/w him & his opponent is obvious that amend had the upperhand on that...
v/ amend
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