Last Night

[Orc]

...Strange, lol. Yeah, storyline was dope, the ending was unexpected which was refreshing, believe me. Some parts I had to re-read though because the flow was a little edgy, it wasn't off per say but it was just rough sounding or awkward. Imagery was cool, nothing overly vivid or anything - it was eerie though, sinister. However, the complexity of the plot more than made up for any technical mishaps/errors on the flow and the rhyme-scheme was different so yeah it was a dope drop man, keep it up. And feed my piece, thanks.

[Cody Nash]

thanks burd... I'll get to it after a bit.

[Writeamus Prime]

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...el-363059.html

^^^link for you to hit since you never got to my evening news joint

[Writeamus Prime]

no pressure or anger or anything...just lke to get that return feed like everyone else...stay up

[Johnny 6-feet]

Sweet as, Cry. you brought your storytelling skills through shining here. The topic was a strong one and you took from different points to make it layed and more interesting. There was great imagry and solid vocab. The rhyme scheme was pretty good and it stayed consistent until the end. Good work man.

Keep posting, thanks for the rep.

[Slugz.]

Brilliant...i was bored and lost in te beginning, second verse i still couldnt see what you were up to, then i was hooked(i actually caught myself smiling) ...the ending seemed some what blunt, which was actually perfect...
Props on a job well done