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    The Art of Battle ft. Baron

    Baron
    Brandon Cee



    He never felt blows in his glass house cold
    old mouse scuttling past a gold watch stole
    the gold scotch told a tale of life in alcohol
    which he drank aplenty- when empty he lolled
    sideways- to hold on his dreams he’d close
    his eyes but it seems they evade his proposed
    capture- he wants them but only in dreams
    it’s rapture - so his fantasies remain unseen
    to others- to them he’s insane in his membrane
    to him it’s game of survival of life in all planes
    astral & physical remain intact but to pact
    with Satan he acts quick & a swift blow attacks
    the cardinal- no need for last rights he’ll fight
    to write till the last notebook page unhooks light
    And gets filled with words of misery & plight
    of history & spite, mystery as to why?- he died
    or why he’d ever been alive- never known
    so he died all alone- lone in his miserable moans


    I must be on something as I wait while applause touches
    Notice my claws clutching a heart as it hits the pause button
    I've got nothing to hide, but I tried to compensate for lies
    It's not my faith that dies - my lungs brought that angst inside
    Stuck on my way to tithe as my wage brings rage to flames
    I've escaped the maze - delayed the phrase to escape a name
    And then I became engaged even without a love or a finger
    My voice can be forgotten, but her's was a song with no singer
    Hating my morals, the passion for floral cut her in seconds
    But she was mine, my mother nature with a brother in heaven
    I'm a dud and it's clever; she made me feel stuck in a web
    Brushing her head with my hand left me feeling ounces of lead
    I'm out of red, the crimson spinal tap of mine will wrap it up
    Laugh at doves that bring peace to the Earth in massive chunks
    For they'll have no fun without you doing much harm to them
    A camera to harpoon friends works to hurt them with a new lens
    I knew then, so let's just say, that it's ok if the feather feels
    More than a mixed emotion in rythymic words as this letter kills

    I’m crazy touching my body but baby I’m fuckin’ all yours
    Potent combustive poison for whores lucking on all fours
    I’m a champion who’ll ride, bust a rap to misplace your prize
    I’ll sedate what you pries- while I lunge to disgrace more lies
    Displaced on my path I renegade to abbreviate what I stack
    go do that math- as I serenade to deviate defense from attack
    And you see me in respect such as no other and I act adept
    & can give a speech so incorrect- tactless man I tack a text
    so useless and it’s easy to see, she makes me above luck & we
    seem one, I & she, when she rakes my back in love fucks lovingly
    I’m out of my mind- with her running ruining my game man it
    Is over her head that she’s gunning to tuning my plain stand shit
    so I’m a champion with no side- I kick out the wannabe wife
    start afresh I’m gonna see it right- as I pick out black Donnelly’s bride
    I grab the gun & shoot- I pull the fun to loot the hooter’s boots
    wear them & faint feeling abused- shoes on I used to looter’s toots
    now the shooters loose- I’m feeling misused as I write you a will
    and I’m all right- so why do I feel I have a right to a kill
    forgive me my ills my minds gone mental & I’m so insane
    pooling old forgotten bills I mine singing songs & dying slow- slain


    I expel prose to my fellow people that know what
    I know is involved in a crack whore and an addict
    who's scars show that he's hurt as he believes you're
    there to point and laugh, enjoy it fast - those who
    got your back get annoyed real fast since you're a
    menace who's regetting ever becoming a racist in
    society - you became a dentist to take your anger
    out on patience is a virtue, but I never regret waiting
    for my brith to backfire yet I retire death to burlap sacks
    'til what's left expires past my retirment - rewire half my
    environment and I'll speak technoligically sound, I'm
    pissed at all of these clowns trying to wear epistomology's
    crown as a hat for the poor man to understand what
    wealth defines to a rich man, it repels demons and accels
    scenes in healthy time to persuade and seduce your essence.

    With these powers combined, our styles have clashed.
    Legendary Song - Winter Snow



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    Last edited by Brandon Cee; February 29th, 2008 at 09:04 PM
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    Re: The Art of Battle ft. Baron

    k our links are up.
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    Re: The Art of Battle ft. Baron

    Alrighty...

    Baron - tight knitted wording as usual, the wordplay was very nice..and it was kind of a fun style you used..it was a normal structure but you had fun with some placement of words etc..and made for a nice overall flow of things..a bit different aswell. You brought a sense of complexity within your content, and even though you had good wordchoice etc it was mostly a compliment to what you where saying..which was nice. overall you had two nice verses...

    Brandon - Also great wording but in a different light, you really executed the internals, rhymescheme to its fullest potential...Style was good for it gave out a lot which can often hinder in actual content but you did a good job of keepig meaning behind the words..which is also nice...like i said a different approach then baron however it still in a sense comes down to the same idea...good work


    overall - i do unfortunately have a problem...it has nothing to do with your pieces individually because these verses on there own are very well executed n powerful...however placed into one and none the less a collab...it left me lost. the first 2 verses didnt match up much at all n left me feeling like i was reading 2 seperate pieces.....the last 2 verses had similiar ideas but even so didnt blend well together.... so my only negativity i can place on this piece would be the blending of the overall idea and verses...but all in all the verses were still pretty damn dope!
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    Re: The Art of Battle ft. Baron

    Thanks man, there wasn't no main focus to match really, the whole peice was a clash of two different style as me and Brandon wrote in our own and then each others style.
    Kiss me through the camera lens.
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    Re: The Art of Battle ft. Baron

    yea this was pretty good..all because of the wording which really caught my eye and that you guess kept the flow at a steady pace..have to have talent to do that..good job..and keep at it..also nice imagery..

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    Re: The Art of Battle ft. Baron

    thanks.
    Kiss me through the camera lens.
    TNL

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    Re: The Art of Battle ft. Baron

    wow this was fucking great lol, i loved this... the whole concept is just wow... you guys basically brokedown the essence of a battle between two completely different persons... and I LOVE how you used each others styles, that was actually quite dope to see... although brandon, I'd say that you pulled off his style not as well as he does lol. your rhyme scheme was sort of jacked in the last stanza, but it also made this very original and cool because in a way it showed that it's hard to mimic the enemy style. it sort of portrayed fighting fire with fire, which is also a dope concept... kind of like your own styles weren't working so you switched it up to your opponents style... very nicely done men... very nice... my favorite stanza would have to be baron's second one... that's a side of you I've never seen before, and I actually enjoyed it a lot... the first two were dope too... the closure was my least favorite but by no means was it bad... it just seemed experamental which seems to be the point of it, so I won't dock ya there... good read though dudes... I'll go ahead and nom the beast cuz I liked it so much... real original actually...



    dope...


    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...ht-362284.html
    feed up on this link too if you could guys, I'd really enjoy your opinion... it's a no show verse for a crew battle, took a lot of time on it so I want some kind of recognition on it...



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    Re: The Art of Battle ft. Baron

    word up holmes. uppin.
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    Re: The Art of Battle ft. Baron

    feed erased due to bitchmadeness
    Last edited by Writeamus Prime; March 5th, 2008 at 12:07 PM
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    Re: The Art of Battle ft. Baron

    It's a strange one to be sure, i dug the topic but there was a strnage disruption in the second half of the piece between the harmony to 2 wrote in. I think it was deliberate given the final line, it just seemed that baron went off on one and then brandon wrote a verse that didn't rhyme so well. However the imagery in this was on point for the piece, the rhyme scheme was dope for the first 3 verses and the vocab was always at an intelligent, but not pretentious, level. I was expecting quality and i got it.

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    Re: The Art of Battle ft. Baron

    Thanks John. Uppin.
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    Re: The Art of Battle ft. Baron

    why are you upping the sht when people leave links you dont return them yet you want feed? thats a bitch move brandon...dont even fck with my link dude...matter of fact...ill edit it out for ya bitch ass
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    Re: The Art of Battle ft. Baron

    I am sure Baron left feed on your piece, if not, I would have. I am in class dude, I don't fuckin have time to leave a full critique/.
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