It's Been Said.

[Tragedian.]

It’s been said…

*I won’t do this, I won’t do that
I’ll be your dream girl for ever*

Broken promise’s…to many stupid lies
& to my surprise, I believe it with pride
The relationship dies, as she cries at night
But doesn’t think twice about why we fight
Fright of me leaving, might get her thinking
Yet she keeps going – a ship that keeps sinking

Even though you keep pushing your luck
I still want your kids,
Call it love but for some reason
………I really just don’t give a fuck

A Poem of Hers...

“She’s way better look’ in all the way,
I sit and think bout this every single day”

To me … the views blurry, you worry over nothing
But this relationship is jam packed, lies with stuffing
As I write this now … you’re in the middle of a lie
And time after time, I keep on wondering … why?
What good does it do? Then again, what good are you?
Why lie about the truth, & 10 minutes later admit to it too
My plans always so sweet, but I’m beat…you ruin it all
I’d stand on my head for you … but you’d let me fall
I’m in no hurry to call, hell…I’d never bother you baby
But you’re to focus on your self, are you even my lady?
I’m going crazy, my family hates me…yet they can go die
But how can you lie to my face, while staring into my eyes
You were a prize to me; I must have come first in the bracket
You don’t even care though, writing this is more of a practice
I love the taste you cook, and that pace its great…your looks!
And you hate my friends so I closed down my face…book
I submit to this shit, you win…I give up…I’ve finally had it
Our love is in your hands … so it’s up to you if we vanish

It’s been said more than enough, I love your touch
But your lies and shit…gotta end…it’s been too much
So I guess we can say I’m bailing … this ships started sailing
But why try to save something that’s bound to keep failing
And when I leave, you best believe I’ll tear up these notes
Cuz it’s not that you lied, it’s that I trusted you hurt most

I’ll leave with a good side of things, you were a diamond ring
It’s a song I sing, that says you were…well - my everything

[Tragedian.]

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...my-359831.html
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...ia-360007.html

[Vincent Maestro]

wow....this sounds like its something that you're going through like Right NOW.
cool way to stuff all that emotion into a piece...a love pieces like that.
the rhyme scheme was on point and the topic is always doper when its a real one.
This rhyme had a lot of quotables but I'ma go with these lines:


What good does it do? Then again, what good are you?
Why lie about the truth, & 10 minutes later admit to it too
My plans always so sweet, but I’m beat…you ruin it all
I’d stand on my head for you … but you’d let me fall
I’m in no hurry to call, hell…I’d never bother you baby
But you’re to focus on your self, are you even my lady?
I’m going crazy, my family hates me…yet they can go die

....sounds like you really gave up everything for a girl and she just was too jealous of other people around you to realize it.....

dope piece...and stay strong man.

pz.

[Noodlez]

some real shit right here , sounds like ur speakin the truth and this shit flowed very nicely 8.5/10 very nice drop

check out quickly shits hard to get feed

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...er-360108.html

[Supernat]

it was so good i'll read it again, i can't judge it tho cuz i'm text.

[J.ProV.]

This was ill.. ill.. ill
Yeah. People can relate to what your writing. Some real shit.
I don't even need to talk about flow and inner rhymes.. those were there
What this piece was written about was what stood out. It really had me wanting to continue read which is what most pieces sometimes lack. I could read this again, no lie.

With that said, I would rate this an 8.5/10. Good Work.

[Tragedian.]

Thanks alot, this shit actually just happened Sin lolz.

[Fo Twenty]

That was def dope. Your flow was on lock, and it was definetly something I'm sure a lot of people can relate to.