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    Another Story and Drawn in Ink. [With Twixn]

    Another Story and Drawn in Ink
    By: Twixn then Fractured


    Another Story Blasted,
    with colors misfit to blend.
    With the lies so easily cloaked,
    in the dark. Stabbing and probing
    at the minds eye.
    Perceiving a new landscape
    set to droop.
    Like the facial features
    of one accepting loss.
    My story is one,
    most wouldn't want to hear.
    So I scribble away
    and hope it reads clear.
    It falls on bleak ears,
    as my world turns to Braille.
    Yet I was never taught
    to feel my surroundings.
    Just to hope I find my way
    in the dark without a flashlight.
    The past is right there,
    so to cope, I paint it on a canvas.
    And hope it lifts from my shoulders
    from time to time.
    So I can breathe the air, pure crisp
    observe the beauty
    I tend to miss while I’m stuck
    in this dreamscape I created.
    A bubble crafted from tragic actions...
    burrowing beneath the city streets
    my peace, my torment...
    My story.

    When the ink stitches itself
    permanently onto my skin.
    Breathe out then breathe in
    so I can imagine the concept.
    Why would someone carve
    a picture into their body?
    I'm sorry, but who's too
    question my own decision?
    It's my tissue, so I'll rip it
    any way that I rightfully want.
    And when the time comes,
    you can stare at my life story.
    It's painted like a sculpture,
    printed among the surface.
    With a meaning too be told
    and a rightful purpose.
    Worthless words spread
    with ink and various colors.
    To give meaning that only
    can explain itself to others.
    The details in the design
    tell it's reason's to the people.
    And can describe only the
    vivid imagery with a needle.
    And for those who sit there,
    misunderstanding this freak.
    It's just another story,
    and drawn in ink.
    Last edited by Pacino; February 2nd, 2008 at 07:01 PM

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    Re: Another Story and Drawn in Ink. [With Twixn]

    I like what you did with the structure....

    cool.
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    Re: Another Story and Drawn in Ink. [With Twixn]

    Budump.

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    Re: Another Story and Drawn in Ink. [With Twixn]

    pretty dope piece. not too shabby at all. it was a smoothe read, not too original, but well written. I felt whoever wrote the second stanza had issues with the usage of the words too; to.... dunno, I'm picky like that though and it will probably only throw ME off :\ lol. but yeah, this was a good read men, keep it up. decent collabo, seen better from the both of you, but then again maybe this one was just a quick write up from the both of ya... it was good no doubt though, keep it up kiddos!!


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