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    united we bomb & loot

    united we bomb & loot.
    Written by, Luke Bloomquist.

    broken wings are meant to be fixed,
    but heaven is full of lazy angels.
    bohemian hedonists impregnate children
    with too many bullshit ideas;
    keeping their feet in the sky,
    and their heads in the ground.
    the failure to separate church from state,
    fails to blend our stars with our stripes
    distinguish our reds, from our whites.
    and its common knowledge,
    that no one gives a fuck about the blue.
    our politicians wear casualty statistics around their necks,
    and advertise their ‘holiness’ on each and every voting ballot.
    democracy is but an abstract melting pot
    of arrogant ignorance blended with a few bible verses,
    with just the right amount of third world countries,
    and only a hint, of hope.
    broken wings are meant to be fixed,
    but heaven is full of lazy angels,
    and america has one too many in office.
    Po'Ethics - Est. 2004




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    Re: united we bomb & loot

    I usually hate shorter pieces because usually they do not get the message across. But this really did. I love how it started off being realigious and then shifted it's way to pollitics. you crossed the two together very well man. The imagery here was enough to set me up for beautiful envisionments. The emotion was enough to get me feeling how you feel about the subject. Wording was, like Atticus' piece, a lot better then what a lot of the writers on this site pull out. And I greatly appreticate that. I love when legendary writers come back and drop something brilliant. It's trully a breath of fresh air. Keep writing man. This concept was dope. And i really would like for you too drop more than one piece every 6 months lol. Keeep at it.

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    Re: united we bomb & loot

    thanks.
    i try to write when i can.
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    Re: united we bomb & loot

    up.
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    Re: united we bomb & loot

    this has all the nuts & bolts to a sound poem. it graced over the apparent downfall of america quite nicely. But honestly, it seems like all of your pieces are somewhat the same, Exodus 14: ; Shadow Savior ; united we bomb. idk, not that it's bad, just seems sort of used already. but great piece. if you wouldn't mind, Nature Economics is being slept on, it's Me and Macabre.
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    Re: united we bomb & loot

    yeah. i like political pieces somewhat.
    due to my spoken word performances lately, for some reason i havent been writing em.
    this piece was about a month ago.
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    Re: united we bomb & loot

    rtf with the link above please?

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    Re: united we bomb & loot

    will if i get the time.
    studying for finals, sorry.
    im not good with the whole returning the favor deal.
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    Re: united we bomb & loot

    aye
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    Re: united we bomb & loot

    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...60#post6181760
    Pretty Short Piece. Would you mind leaving some feed? Even short feed just telling wether you liked the piece or not is cool. thanks.
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    Re: united we bomb & loot

    k people.
    ill get at your poems when i have the time.
    any more crits?
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