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    A School For Oedipus! Poeta&Ledge

    A School for Oedipus!



    Forced dicks:
    fish bones in pussy throats
    Scaling screams soprano
    Lead by the smell of fear
    Instead of memory
    She walks the fishborn son outside
    Of girls and woman-folk lines
    Then shows him how to trace
    Before kindergarten teachers
    Get a whiff of his pen

    Abstract love affair, held together
    with Mommy's summer sweat beads,
    he plucks her a melody on bloody
    heartstrings, screaming down her
    throat words that would make a
    preacher's blood curdle in disgust.
    Tongues meet cheeks, like disease
    searching for a lover; Her seductive
    slender body, slipping into something...
    "More comfortable"...like, persuasion.
    Night time sends shivers down his spine,
    but he isn't scared of the dark, he finds
    comfort there, in the shadows, where he
    feels he belongs...


    He won't go inside
    First girl he meets
    On the perimeter is mommy
    She's holding picket signs
    On the borders of his dreams
    He wakes with them in hand
    Wet, plastered flesh candy wrappers
    Lodged between pointer, and middle finger
    Pictures of dismembered body parts
    Lay beneath his pillow
    He puts them together
    At night with his glue
    ...when she is not around
    He wants to be an artist
    When he grows up
    Paper Mache-ist


    “Momma says women are God’s personal trees: here to root humanity.”


    He finds comfort
    Shade in her presence
    Left-I peripheral:
    He is searching for Miss Kaufman
    The third grade substitute
    That hugged him for being the day’s helper
    He can smell ripeness on women's breast
    It makes his mouth water


    Subtle suggestion of romance curses
    through his veins, like a drug too
    strong willed to allow release.
    He drowns in her perfume, submitting
    his desires into female caress;
    He's done the math she wanted him to do,
    and he's come to the conclusion she
    is his next fix of hope; he's also written
    the words she required, he's scratched them
    onto his arm with razor blade precision;
    He speaks to her words of adult
    nature, and as she rejects his love
    he paints the walls with tears;
    he smiles behind the water shades he
    has created, and basks in the crystal eye
    balls distorted vision; Taking her fragile
    body in deep, with semen breath to sleep
    amongst torn underwear; The doors are
    thicker than his love for her, so no one
    can hear lingering screams; The pictures kept
    under the pillow creep back into mind...
    as she lays, vulnerable, he decides to relieve
    her from the pain she clearly feels...'how can
    any happy person reject true love?'

    Tied up, whilst gagged by fear, she dares
    not speak, or even whisper... her tongue
    is now swimming in blood, staining
    the floor with regret; cookery class is
    coming to an end, he's chopped up the
    meat he'll need, and now he realizes he
    has to return to his first love...Mommy.



    Right-I peripheral:
    She is behind closed door
    Earthed by steam
    Underneath a rain shower
    Daydreaming with soap suds
    Shooting bubbles through
    A forbidden wand and whispering

    Mommy holds her little devil,
    rocks him to sleep with a tale from
    a broke back bible, she singes the air
    with a kiss, and breaths calm warmth
    into his cold lungs; Miss Kaufman
    is in bits over this tragedy, yet our
    resident artist puts her back together again
    with a caring needle, and Frankenstein's wire.
    She longs to be with nature, so the forest
    is a perfect place to sleep...
    He leans in to show his affection, but
    his living lover shy's away with winter
    cold words; he twitches with pearly whites
    itching for a taste of abstract art...
    Mommy's throat is now an open book,
    her love is leaking while her tears fall
    red, like rivers of dirty waste; he
    gently whispers in her ear...

    “I'm sorry Mama”

    She won't wake to find
    Broken branches
    Bearing the weight of winter
    Nor leaves strewn by autumn’s gust
    Not a twig of noise for forest
    Animals to alert hunters

    Cautiously, Mama scrubs and washes
    And he watches the last tail exit the drain
    Wailing downstream

    "I love you enough to free you"











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    Last edited by Poeta Demonio; January 15th, 2008 at 06:41 PM

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    Re: A School For Oedipus! Poeta&Ledge

    WOW! Phenomal, seriously, not many people could pull a write off of this calibur. Hopefully, the others that feed this no the story of Oedipus and his Oedipus complex that caused the marrying of him and his mother. lol, yeahhh ledge. Anyway, I just got caught rambling on, so, this was ill on both parts. So he's in love with his teacher? cool. I, in all honesty would nominate this for LEGENDS if we weren't in the same crew, and they say it was unfair. Hell I might nominate it anyway, if you guys think it would be alright, because being honest, this was ill. Lol, sorry im rambling so much, im at loss of words of what to actually say. ledge and poeta, your sick twisted imagery was seriously, like, uh, gross.

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    Re: A School For Oedipus! Poeta&Ledge

    Yeah it would be cool nominating it, as long as YOU feel its worthy. Cheers for the feed man, appreciated.

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    Obviously I do, I'm going to!
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    Re: A School For Oedipus! Poeta&Ledge

    This is the best collab I've ever seen in the poetry section....how the hell did y'all come up with such a creative topic.....I like the idea of it being like a young boy....this is like the oedipus story with a twist cause the teacher was also in love with the boy right?.....the "miss Kaufman"...thing was kinda getting me off track as far as the storyline was concerned.

    both writers dropped very focused pieces....the imagery here was superb I haven't seen anything like it in this forum.


    Fav. Lines in the whole piece.


    balls distorted vision; Taking her fragile
    body in deep, with semen breath to sleep
    amongst torn underwear; The doors are
    thicker than his love for her, so no one
    can hear lingering screams; The pictures kept
    under the pillow creep back into mind...
    these lines were just really freaky and I love how they are worded....
    you could get a hard-on reading this piece the imagery is so good in some places...haha....job well done with this one.

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