tite flow yo.... internal rhyming and content was hot, i felt some of the end rhymes in general could of been more thought out to have a more dynamic effect.....content was nicee though for real, and had a most original approach.
as the verse goes on you apply some good humour, nice work on the content all in all, i gotta agree with envigale on rhyming it out on the "ing" thing, it sort of took away from the quality of the verse in my view, as the end rhymes became somewhat uninteresting and near predictable
still a nicee piece for real, content was put together really well, and displayed plenty of character
pz