I Could Get Kicced Off This Site, I Dont Cizzare

[Don Jay]

i cud get kicced off this site i really dont cizzare/
make me write till my hands bleezare/
chyea nigga, u wanna be a hot boy/
niggas get shot up wit them hot toys/
wit u think is da gud life is not joy/
niggas livin so devilish/
u know da death statistics is mo visible in da censuses/
so i aint want no lookin down so i had ta spit da best of shit/
u kno wut da method is/
i hate SAT's n all dem regents/
gotta do it till my eyes bleedin/
u wasnt teachin right/
u gurls need a life/
faggot ass niggas on my dicc need a wife/
like ll need his radio i need a mic/
see, wus gud wit u/
niggas tryna be like, i'm too hood 4 u/
but if i was ta book wit da crooks, u shook my dude/
i luv da song shook ones from Mobb Deep/
niggas wanna clocc me/
females wit emails sendin me shit now cuz i'm coccy/
cant see imma still keep gettin up afta defeat like Roccy/
jus like dat bullet goin to da man taken 4 death u cant stop me/
dont care about da teflon vest/
niggas kno i shine like da lights got left on yes/

[(GoRilla)]

People say your dope but I don't see it, looks like your just whippin out rhyme after rhyme and it all sounds hurried. Sorry man, I liked these lines though:

luv da song shook ones from Mobb Deep/
niggas wanna clocc me/
females wit emails sendin me shit now cuz i'm coccy/

[Don Jay]

thanx man i'll consida that.

[sILLable]

i havent heard anyone say he's dope..because he sucks....your rhymes are weak..it would require the most massive amounts of elevation for you to improve even slightly.....get a new hobby.~1~

[Man of Steel Man]

i know you are banned but maybe you got an alias and you still check in or maybe you got friends on here that check for you...but first before i get to this crap...WTF at you comin at me in an open mic...but ya ass never called me out on the battle tip...keep my name out ya effin mouth...now to this piece...like treazon said...you suck large monkey balls no homo and i cant imagine anyone sayin you are ill...i dont know why you dont take advice and do something with your rhyme game...maybe you reached your peak and cant elevate creatively...who knows...this blows.

[Vincent Maestro]

I see potential but I haven't been seeing you elevate......
You refuse to choose a topic and try to write an overall good rhyme
Your rhymes right now are lacking any type of Versatility


Try to concentrate your imaginative powers and avoid jotting alot of uninspired lines,,,,

keep practicing i see potential but You have to consciously seek to make improvements in your Writing....

1....hope i was constructive as i was Negative in this Feed

5/10

[Tim]

*dies*

[Possible]

Horrible, Deplorable

[Axeshun]

Is that Daz?

[The Smarter Martyr]

that was the most horrible thing i've seen all week.

[SmokaJoka]

wtf @ these haters


this shit had a deep ass poetic feel to it, HoF worthy indeed..I'm nominating it

[Judge Judy]

for real...^

keep it up player, you got that swagger, i can always tell when peeps are going to make it big, and well, i have a feeling about you.

[million dollar man]

hahaah beautiful piece man. 10/10. jp, but what is actually funny, but sad at the same time, these are the kind of rappers you hear on the radio and see on the television. Step it up

[Engivale]

wtf @ these haters


this shit had a deep ass poetic feel to it, HoF worthy indeed..I'm nominating it

What... The... Fuck? Are you fucking serious? See, now how am I supposed to feel bad about ever calling you out, dude? I'm sitting here trying to let bygones be bygones and then I see you nominated this, and knowing full well this guy is about a 6/100 I had to see what the hell you were on. I mean, if you dig this, its your opinion, but I am honestly stunned. I am so glad I only have to read you guys post on the internet, thank god you live nowhere near me. This took about as much talent as tying your shoes, man.

[Man of Steel Man]

i believe he was being sarcastic . though he did nominate it...it must be a practical joke for seriousness...and i like how you hit my link after i left feed on your joint as well...thanks for that