If It Aint 1 Thang...

[Don Jay]

ITS A SUICIDE GOIN AGAINST DON JAY/
DA NAME'S SCARFACE/
n nah, i aint tryna be a gangsta/
i'm jus tryna be da man to shank ya/
mo money in da bank son/
anotha nigga actin like a babie in pampers/
tryna go against a rappa/
niggas act up n get clapped up/
like a gud performance at da Apollo/
n i got so much happiness in my life like i jus strucc da Lotto/
n niggas kno i got hoes/
da same way Bill Gates got do/
niggas got froze/
when my niggas popped up wit da tools like they robbed ya dads toolshed/
nigga i'm here alive, but who's dead?/
nigga i'm roccin da true n u red/
oozin/
wit nuthin but blood but dont call 911/
i mean i'm ya son/
if u fathered my flo..../
so i guess imma orphan u kno/
i keep pourin da flo/

[Vincent Maestro]

damn dude...u dropping alot of OM's but i don't see no feeds...if you wanna get a few feeds try reading some of the other shit on the site...It'll keep your shit from getting closed and it'll also help you elevate ma dudes....

best lines were:
niggas act up n get clapped up/
like a gud performance at da Apollo/
n i got so much happiness in my life like i jus strucc da Lotto/
n niggas kno i got hoes/
da same way Bill Gates got do/
niggas got froze/
when my niggas popped up wit da tools like they robbed ya dads toolshed/
this was a weak rhyme...try to do some story-telling in your verses

Rating:5/10...i see no improvements man....

keep writing...and trying to gett better...u will get better if u keep practicing...aight

[Plexus]

Again read the rules. To many drops in one day.

Closed