Full of Light and Sunshine I'm not - Opus & Tim

[Johnny 6-feet]

Poetic, on topic til the end and a smooth transition from one writer to the other. Tim, i've read a lot of work from you before and i know you're picky about who you work with so i was expecting a good piece and was not disapointed. The imagery was consistently vivid, the mark of a couple of topical heads for sure. The rhymne scheme was straightforward but that didn't really have any negative impact on the overall quality of the work. The vocab was also well-chosen and easy to follow.

Good work guys. Keep posting.

[P. Mortuus]

Thanks for the feed I see you return it leave another link if you want and I will get to it........

[Vincent Maestro]

I liked this for alot of reasons and might've noticed some things others didn't.
1st off I like how the first verse was real technical and rigid....with a very organized rhyme scheme....
Then the second verse was real nice structure-wise too but it was oozing with imagery and vivid descriptions....the vocab was a little more pronounced in the second Verse...examples:
as my mind tried to change into a new suit, I found a letter from you
hidden in the pocket it said you where returning, could it be true...
I thought he was talking about a Girl but he was talking about his poetry and the writers block that kept him apart from writing hot rhymes.....
very complex but still very easy to read.......
I would have liked it more if the first verse had much emotion pouring from it as the latter....

rating 9/10