The Conflict Within Me...

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open mic...for the kids with no hope n sight
boast insight but feelin to doped to write
pierceing the darkness like a beam of focused light
so close to christ makin the most a life
find happiness, you think they have a leg up cuz their rich
most of em live a life of more regrets then a veg-as marriage
search ya soul at worst it never hurts to know
Aspire to inspire don’t shirk the role
Jus goin thru the motions man
Might as well call me motion, man…
Roll homie, no phony
Got a lot that go for me
Still true sittin back sippin that 22 o.e.
How im goin~known~watch~closely
Cop it, flip it, get it back witt no cheese
Skeetin witt skeezas n roadies
Dressed in all black witt a ball cap n dro weed
Damn near sellin it fo free
Get it off get it back the cycle repeat
Cash strapped strapped 4 cash a life in the streets

[Vincent Maestro]

nice short rhyme....i think this had a good flow...i think the flow was the strong pont of this rhyme...Very good Rhyme pattern

keep Rolling

rating=5.5/10.....cause it was kinda short y'know

peace

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Uppin

[Man of Steel Man]

this piece was aight in the beg. but it kinda fell off a bit hard at the end...you had a good multi flow to your verse at the start which continued well into the middle...the place where you fell off was when you started talkin bout the drugs and the alcohol...not sayin that the subject matter cant be made dope...no pun intended...but it seemed like you were kinda rushing to end it once you got to that point...thats just my opinion...im no expert or anything...cheers

[Man of Steel Man]

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...es-356374.html

hit that if you will