Substance

[A.T.]

I'm not that hungry for props, this shit just seems to be fun to me,
But whether I like it or not, disses seem to come to me abundently,
But, I keep displayin my thoughts for some to see, so redundantly,
Habitually repressing my urge to swing and start writing a verse to reverse the scene.
The disturbing thing, is that I cant seem to find the words to speak,
Got over 550 post on R.B. & half these cats have never heard of me,

I got plans for the new breed, but like most pictures, they'll never develop,
I've offered to give them away, because I couldn't allow myself to sell 'em,
I dont want wealth or the women, I just wanna learn to express my soul,
To be able to spit out venom at cats... like the way these veteran's role,
I expect to fold, let the truth be told, I can't even get respect no more,
I'll try to inspect some more, as I set out searchin the 4 corners of the globe,

Then my entire minds on end, I'm defining legit, leaving this time suspensed,
Then all of a sudden my minds convinced, its almost like the sky condensed,
The ingredient I've been missing is that divining shit thats called substance...




http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...ry-354309.html

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...-4-354303.html

[Vincent Maestro]

honestly A.T..you're one of my favorite emcees in the OM section...I hope you didn't see the comment I made in my keystyle as a Diss...it was a name-drop cause I want everyone to notice you're one of the top heads in the OM section...........................Good rhyme had good structure and was well-written good vocab....wasn't a rhyme that really needed Imagery....your strenght is the pure expression of the rhyme...

Favorite Lines were as Follows:
I got plans for the new breed, but like most pictures, they'll never develop,
I've offered to give them away, because I couldn't allow myself to sell 'em,
I dont want wealth or the women, I just wanna learn to express my soul,
To be able to spit out venom at cats... like the way these veteran's role,
I expect to fold, let the truth be told, I can't even get respect no more,
I'll try to inspect some more, as I set out searchin the 4 corners of the globe,
those lines described A.T. best

[A.T.]

thanks man, I appreciate that

up...

[Linex]

damn this looks like its mad deep to you, lol.

i see how you were talking about in this piece how you wanted to make a name for yourself and things like that. i guess this really is the way that you were feeling at the moment when you were writing this piece. this was an good OM because for once someone actually wrote about how they felt and not about some idiot storyline. nice read man keep it up, oh and by the way you dont need to be a vet to drop dope piececs man just work at it and you could build your rep, its that easy. nice read, 1.

[A.T.]

up, up , and awayyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyy

[The Vortex]

good flow in most places, got a bit stretched on a couple of lines.
had some coo rhyming skills,
just meditate on something more to say and perhaps add a bit of imagery for a more doper om, coz u had some good expression for this piece, so to put that same expression into a more intense topic would probably be good


pz1

[A.T.]

up again, lets get some feed

[A.T.]

up///////////////////

[A.T.]

upitty upityy up

[Triz]

Nice deep piece.. what i like to see tbh, kinda see what you're sayin,
life aint easy n feels like the worlds against u n shit.. i notice
that you kinda put you're heart into what you write, woulda liked to see more
on this piece though. tells the story, gets the point accross,
it's not the kinda stuff that i could rap, i couldn't see myself spitting
you're lyrics, ( not in a bad way ).. like..

"But, I keep displayin my thoughts for some to see, so redundantly,
Habitually repressing my urge to swing and start writing a verse to reverse the scene"

^^ i can see you're using sylibles, but Habitually does it for me there.. kinda
threw me off there to be honest..

Thats all i could really fault with that drop.. good shit, keep writing, would like to see more. (Y)