Varsity Blues

[Vincent Maestro]

replied to best friends Sister and How can I smile part.2.....and a bunch of other OM's...come on floks return the Favor.

This rhyme was for a Collab with Mariah Noelle but she never got back to me with a Verse...i pm'd it to her but she never hit me back so fuck it.
It was gonna be about conformity and pressures of fitiing in with others.


MY VERSE:
They say the real world is high school all over again
but i was a lonely soul a Loner with no friends
repeatedly picked on so i got into many fights
blessed with a lethal left and a deadly Right
they supposed to start grimacing when u hit hard as
R.Christensen...sometimes i imagine life without social castes a place where i don't feel like a waste of time
A place where they don't measure theline round your waist I've tasted varsity blues and been fed up
these hand-me-downs compared to they Mecca,
Ecko and fubu and polo sport...rumors spreading
quicker than tumors i heard that kidd Sinizter G. is a Loser a drug addict habitual smoker and boozer
the slightest conformities be feelin like nazi reform
just cause we got d'frent taste we can't get along
I listened to foo fighters and wore grunge pants
so i didn't have buddies the butt of public rants
they'd be like "he's black but he listens to Emo"
Another random blog of the sheeple
As if i didn't have enough problems fitting in
My parents went and became strict religionists
This is imitators world u gotta dare to be different in
fed up with the school psychologist for readin my suicide notes//
My mom had died and I was lost my so-called friends gave me marijuana instead of Hope//
do you know the curse of being light-skinned?
too white for ya black friends too black for ya white friends//
Still spanish people come up when they don't know where to go//
And i be sittin there looking foolish like "mi, no hablo espanol//
I'm starting to hate being called RED y couldn't I
be tall, dark and hansom with long dreads
Maybe vanity is a guide to a man's maturity
This is my personal diatribe on CONFORMITY
chorus:
They say the real world is high school all over again
but i was a lonely soul a Loner with no friends
repeatedly picked on so i got into many fights
blessed with a lethal left and a deadly Right

[Orc]

They say the real world is high school all over again
but i was a lonely soul a Loner with no friends
repeatedly picked on so i got into many fights
blessed with a lethal left and a deadly Right


Cool emotion displayed here man, rhyming was okay.


they supposed to start grimacing when u hit hard as
R.Christensen...sometimes i imagine life without social castes a place where i don't feel like a waste of time
A place where they don't measure theline round your waist I've tasted varsity blues and been fed up
these hand-me-downs compared to they Mecca,
Ecko and fubu and polo sport...rumors spreading
quicker than tumors i heard that kidd Sinizter G. is a Loser a drug addict habitual smoker and boozer


Some cool internals here, emotion & imagery was cool, a bit messy at times though.

the slightest conformities be feelin like nazi reform
just cause we got d'frent taste we can't get along
I listened to foo fighters and wore grunge pants
so i didn't have buddies the butt of public rants
they'd be like "he's black but he listens to Emo"
Another random blog of the sheeple
As if i didn't have enough problems fitting in
My parents went and became strict religionists
This is imitators world u gotta dare to be different in
fed up with the school psychologist for readin my suicide notes//
My mom had died and I was lost my so-called friends gave me marijuana instead of Hope//

Cool part, again, emotion is is your strongest skill, imagery & flow were cool here though. Depth to the story line was also added, nice.

do you know the curse of being light-skinned?
too white for ya black friends too black for ya white friends//

This was dope to me^.

Still spanish people come up when they don't know where to go//
And i be sittin there looking foolish like "mi, no hablo espanol//
I'm starting to hate being called RED y couldn't I
be tall, dark and hansom with long dreads
Maybe vanity is a guide to a man's maturity

Again, the last line was dope^.

This is my personal diatribe on CONFORMITY
chorus:
They say the real world is high school all over again
but i was a lonely soul a Loner with no friends
repeatedly picked on so i got into many fights
blessed with a lethal left and a deadly Right


Cool way to close.

The hook was a nice way of opening & closing the piece, your flow was cool throughout, you could tighten it up a bit, mate. Try adding more multies & A more complex rhyme-scheme to really make your flow top notch, emotion conveyed was nice & your vocab was nice, the meaningful lines you had at times were cool too. Nice little piece here man.