The Night (Blood Ink Collab)

[Plexus]

The Night
(Blood Ink Collab)

Whispers fall from sight... we call this night
a time when most humans spread the blight.
talking of heists... and who currently has the rarest spice
they trade cocaine like bread,... that's life...
so take flight...
or soon be made a drug pettle'n poltergeist
fallen beneath the moons descending knife
.
.
Ascending heights, to dark for the windows sight
So...when the tints bent right it defuses your eye might,
In delusion your mind fights, its own damn mistakes
Shadows appear in front of you...
Weren't there in the first place?
.
.

The earth breaks me and takes me into the darkest hour
Starts to devour, but these parts of my heart are sour
Be smart with power for responsibility mixes the toxins
And take fantasy to the places that you wish to walk in
Bliss is not sin, but sin is all bliss - notice a reversed side
Coming back to a center without taking that first stride
.
.
hallucinations, flush your patience till your seen as one of the patients
stationed with rage and frustration, for your delirium relations
conscience is vacant, the night's facing the depths of perception
taking steps to deception, till your swept, and kept in a session
no ands, buts, or questions, your fed the meds from the physician
a glimpse of fiction twists your vision, to a state of contradiction
.
.
delighted by the night lit sky invited by the demons
who are some how excited by suffice of the screaming
enticed by the precise twist of evenings when it's
evil seeking. Trying not to let the evil seep in.
Unconscious breathing. Eyes closed and speechless.
In the hour of your brethren preparing bereavement.

The Night.



1.Twixn..
2.Pulse
3.Mariah
4.Morphene
5.Ntemadation

[Vincent Maestro]

I'd give it a 7/10...really liked this one
Its good to see a Crew Collabing on the site.
Liked how you all stayed on topic
My Favorite lines were:
hallucinations, flush your patience till your seen as one of the patients
stationed with rage and frustration, for your delirium relations
conscience is vacant, the night's facing the depths of perception
taking steps to deception, till your swept, and kept in a session
no ands, buts, or questions, your fed the meds from the physician
a glimpse of fiction twists your vision, to a state of contradiction
.........

Morph killed this shit man..

[Vincent Maestro]

I wasn't saying the rest of the piece was weak or anything
I just liked Morph's the most.....on your part i loved the line about bliss and sin...that line made me feel guilty..like i was gonna convert to ascetic tommorow:

Bliss is not sin, but sin is all bliss - notice a reversed side
Coming back to a center without taking that first stride

hot lines Mariah

[Vincent Maestro]

well thats true.....
I think Twixn opened up tight...with the cocaine for bread line...
the drug pettl'n poltergeist thing was very Creative....

Liked how Pulse used the mind playing tricks on itself type of idea...

Liked Ntemadation's drop
this line stuck in my mind for some reason:
In the hour of your brethren preparing bereavement.

[JayCee.]

insane
the flow of the entire piece was near perfection
the imagery and emotion set a nice tone for the topic at hand
although i do feel like parts of the piece could've been a little better w/o the major focus of multis, but the multis were very nice

overall-8.5/10

keep up the nice work

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...da-353288.html
if you wouldn't mind, please dop a quick vote here

[ILL SINSE]

tru talk, tru talk..for real Jay..
that shit was krazy..much props son.

[Judge Judy]

werd. bump!

[A-Tray]

Very nice collab... most times when someone does a collab, someone loses
the concept, but in this peice everyone stayed on target. flow was choppy
in some, but other than that it was a really good read....
my fav. verse was this

hallucinations, flush your patience till your seen as one of the patients
stationed with rage and frustration, for your delirium relations
conscience is vacant, the night's facing the depths of perception
taking steps to deception, till your swept, and kept in a session
no ands, buts, or questions, your fed the meds from the physician
a glimpse of fiction twists your vision, to a state of contradiction

[LedgenZ]

Hmmmm...give me a few hours and I'll comeback and edit some feed into this post!

[Judge Judy]

bumps

[Broly]

This was a very nice collab indeed, everyone
had nice structure, flow, imagery and emotion
Morph's verse IMO stuck out to me the most though
because i felt that he had the best rhymescheme
in this whole collab, but im not saying that other's
rhymescheme's weren't good, just that his was better
other than that id give this piece a 9/10, keep writing.

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...ns-353585.html
RTF

[Twixn...]

word...

thanks for the feed all...

i guess we should toss some links up too eh guys :P.

[Ntalek]

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show....html?t=353530

heres 1 link.

[Plexus]

uhh yea uppity up

[LedgenZ]

Twixn:
I wasn't really a fan of how your verse opened up. Some of the lines seemed forced and the word choice was questionable, for example: "Blight", "Rarest Spice", I just didn't like those words or phrases all. They just seemed awkward to say the least. However, the way the verse progressed was quite opposite. It was littered with exquisite placement, as well as dark and morbid imagery which really suited the topic. It was that puzzle piece that really laid the groundwork for the entire picture. It really set the pace for the rest of the collaboration. I think this dark and mysterious style is what you've become famous for, cause your better at it than anyone else, it just seems to flow through your pen naturally. I enjoy it reading it. Anyway, these lines were nice.



Favorite Lines:

take flight...
or soon be made a drug pettle'n poltergeist
fallen beneath the moons descending knife

^Reminds me of Halloween for some reason, but still the imagery, the flow, everything was there. It really capitalized on the mood of this piece. Good shit!



Pulse:
Your shit sort of reminded me of some old Edgar Allen Poe shit, very abrupt and choppy lines, but still concise and unified in meaning. It was like you depicted the character in which all of these frightful and horrifying images where playing out in his mind. It seems like he was possibly driven mad by these events, to the point that he could no longer decipher the difference between fantasy and reality. More so like a skitzo, but yeah. Wish you would have had a longer verse to better develop your character, but for what it was it was pretty nice. The flow was solid and everything else seemed to be in place as well.



Favorite Lines:

In delusion your mind fights, its own damn mistakes
Shadows appear in front of you...
Weren't there in the first place?

^That was pretty good, the imagery was there, however, I think the whole "weren't" thing was a tad-bit misguided. I think it would have worked much better if you would have replaced it with "weren't they" as to allude to a more inquisitive or confused state of mind. Still pretty good though.



Mariah:
I liked your verse a lot, it seemed very clean cut and orderly. You had a clear idea of what you wanted to say and you did it effectively through your rhymes. I wouldn't necessarily call it "though-provoking", but it definitely made me scratch me chin once or twice. Also, from a technical standpoint your vocabulary, placement, and just flow in general, seemed very polished. It was a dope verse through and through.



Favorite Lines:

The earth breaks me and takes me into the darkest hour
Starts to devour, but these parts of my heart are sour
Be smart with power for responsibility mixes the toxins
And take fantasy to the places that you wish to walk in
Bliss is not sin, but sin is all bliss

^I can't say whether I agree or disagree, but I can say I liked it...a lot. The visual was pretty grim and just the tone of the piece seemed dark, but like Twixn's verse, it really suited the piece as a whole. So...very good job!



Morphene:
You probably had the smoothest verse and flow. It was just so fluid and easy to follow. Also you lyrics were really strong as well, however, your verse wasn't as dark as the other pieces seemed, but still fit the profile properly. Honestly, I have no qualms or disputes with what you did, so there isn't much to comment on. I just liked the feel of it as a whole. So, great job!


Favorite Lines:

taking steps to deception, till your swept, and kept in a session
no ands, buts, or questions, your fed the meds from the physician
a glimpse of fiction twists your vision, to a state of contradiction

^The flow was liquid, every syllable rolled of the tongue like little dripplets of spit. Plus the content was worth some admiration as well. It was nice. what else need be said?



Ntemadation:
You had the darkest and most mood related content. It was very creepy and on point. Your flow was also insanely laced as too was the imagery. I thoroughly enjoyed your verse. You seemed fully engaged in what you were saying. Twixn's verse reminded me of Halloween and yours reminded me of Hell, you truly are two sick and demented motherfuckers. Anyway, dope shit.



Favorite Lines:

delighted by the night lit sky invited by the demons
who are some how excited by suffice of the screaming
enticed by the precise twist of evenings when it's
evil seeking. Trying not to let the evil seep in.

^Shit was wicked and mad evil. I feel less like a human and more like a demon after reading it. So I suppose it served it's function. Dope shit my mans, dope shit!



All in all...this was a good collab. Good-bye.





pZ