Haha! Fooled you into Thinking!

[Engivale]

I'm focused on the no-viss, beginner's must know this
Flow is rapid like gettin' mad at the motives ---
I've had it but no ribs are broken on an addict with closed lips,
Post scripts are the explanations of clothes rips-
Love is there, but what is fair?
The mother's stare or the dad's gaze?
We've passed the "past phase",
People laugh as they ask "What's your catch phrase?"

"I Don't -- Give A --- FUCK!"
---and I mean that...
Lean back and smoke a spliff in a green wrap...
Let the notion drift and I'll open with the omen myth --
Soap and shit scrubbed and then drugged with an opiate...
Soviet ties from highs to lows to Karl Rove's,
That snarl those who would fight the Jaws of gnarled prose...

It would be enforced, but we're
FUCK-ING VOL-UN-TEER-ING!
I call it steering sheep to keep the people small and fearing...
It's all endearing, really, you're just ADORABLE!
As you support the will of these crooks and pay for their WAR TO KILL!!!
Are you sure you still feel like a patriot?
Save me it, you fucking moron, there's been a war on since Habeus -
Corpus, As they've forced this thought process upon you -
They conned you, if you're paying a bill YOU'RE A PAWN TOO!!!
Cuz money is fake, it's power that's real,
And every dollar you make just allows them to steal...
You support the system, YOU DO IT! YOU LET IT HAPPEN!
And how do I make you get it if I stick to multi-syllable rappin?
Every hour you spend is wasted in this culture...
Get to know your mind - It's behind the senses,
But to you it's closer...




I edited my thing out cuz it really ain't the place for it.

[Engivale]

LINKS


http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...st-351983.html
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...es-351996.html

[holly]

holy shit dude, this was so many levels of dope. You spoke nothing but truth and I loved the multies in here dude. This is the first piece of yours that I have actually read through because I'm possibly getting sent away to alternative schooling soon and of course want to practice writing while im there.. so im reading up on some of the more experienced writers. Anyway this was crazy imo dudeee.

Save me it, you fucking moron, there's been a war on since Habeus -
Corpus, As they've forced this thought process upon you -
They conned you, if you're paying a bill YOU'RE A PAWN TOO!!!
Cuz money is fake, it's power that's real,
And every dollar you make just allows them to steal...
You support the system, YOU DO IT! YOU LET IT HAPPEN!
And how do I make you get it if I stick to multi-syllable rappin?

just crazy.

HoF no doubt. I'll nominate it myself

[LedgenZ]

WOW man! There is absolutely no reason in Hell why you shouldn't be inducted into the Legendary Hall already. I mean your writings are freaking amazing! And you are probably my favorite writer on the entire board. This is because you are one of the few cats that can actually make me FEEL something when reading your work. It just never gets boring! I mean the longer your pieces are the deeper they get. And 9 times out of 10 I find myself cracking a smile in delight by the time I reach the end of your verses. They are honestly just that good! And this verse....this fucking verse was ill man! It start out a tad-bit slow in my opinion, probably just because I didn't quit understand everything you were referring to, but the flow kept a steady pace the entire way through, so I was still thoroughly entertained. However, your pieces aren't really about the flow (though always impeccable), they are about the meaning behind the words...and just WOW the meaning in some of these words...cause I swear that towards the end of this verse all I could say or think was DAMN!!!! ...Dude let me just quote a bit for you...



Favorite Lines:

I'm focused on the no-viss, beginner's must know this
Flow is rapid like gettin' mad at the motives ---

^The opening lines were fire in my opinion, I'm not even quite sure what they meant, but they just hit so fucking hard I couldn't help but quote them. Great Job!



Also:

It would be enforced, but we're
FUCK-ING VOL-UN-TEER-ING!
I call it steering sheep to keep the people small and fearing...
It's all endearing, really, you're just ADORABLE!
As you support the will of these crooks and pay for their WAR TO KILL!!!
Are you sure you still feel like a patriot?
Save me it, you fucking moron, there's been a war on since Habeus -
Corpus, As they've forced this thought process upon you -
They conned you, if you're paying a bill YOU'RE A PAWN TOO!!!
Cuz money is fake, it's power that's real,
And every dollar you make just allows them to steal...
You support the system, YOU DO IT! YOU LET IT HAPPEN!
And how do I make you get it if I stick to multi-syllable rappin?
Every hour you spend is wasted in this culture...
Get to know your mind - It's behind the senses,
But to you it's closer...

^That might have single-handedly been the illest sequence of lines I've ever read on RB! WOW...that shit was just amazing. And I say that whole heartly...just WOW! I mean it was absolutely perfect, every single line was fucking ill, flowed like lava, and held more content then the Tree Of Knowledge. You really just seemed to be in the zone, like you were spitting this shit without even thinking about it. It was just so authentic, organic, natural, vibrant, and ALIVE!!! I mean I don't even want to break it down line by line, because the shit you were saying was just so truthful and coherent...like what else can I really say? It was just soooooo true. Dude you got me buggin'. This was insanity. Hall of Fame without a doubt....Legends quality for sure, but you know how that goes. Just illness!


Get at me on AIM whenever...




pZ

[Judge Judy]

damnnnnnnnnnn... i agree with ledge and holly, man this shit was crazy. your opener..

I'm focused on the no-viss, beginner's must know this
Flow is rapid like gettin' mad at the motives ---

wow...just wow. im not sure what you were meaning when you spelt it no viss, but im sure theres a legitimate reason. anway. holy moly, you fucking outdid yourself in the next bars...all the way to the end actually, seriously.

I've had it but no ribs are broken on an addict with closed lips,
Post scripts are the explanations of clothes rips-
Love is there, but what is fair?
The mother's stare or the dad's gaze?
We've passed the "past phase",
People laugh as they ask "What's your catch phrase?"

"I Don't -- Give A --- FUCK!"
---and I mean that...
Lean back and smoke a spliff in a green wrap...
Let the notion drift and I'll open with the omen myth --
Soap and shit scrubbed and then drugged with an opiate...
Soviet ties from highs to lows to Karl Rove's,
That snarl those who would fight the Jaws of gnarled prose...

It would be enforced, but we're
FUCK-ING VOL-UN-TEER-ING!
I call it steering sheep to keep the people small and fearing...
It's all endearing, really, you're just ADORABLE!
As you support the will of these crooks and pay for their WAR TO KILL!!!
Are you sure you still feel like a patriot?
Save me it, you fucking moron, there's been a war on since Habeus -
Corpus, As they've forced this thought process upon you -
They conned you, if you're paying a bill YOU'RE A PAWN TOO!!!
Cuz money is fake, it's power that's real,
And every dollar you make just allows them to steal...
You support the system, YOU DO IT! YOU LET IT HAPPEN!
And how do I make you get it if I stick to multi-syllable rappin?
Every hour you spend is wasted in this culture...
Get to know your mind - It's behind the senses,
But to you it's closer...

i had to quote the whole god damn verse, you want to know why?...because every mother trucking one had so much meaning to it, and so much TALENT...
the bar i bolded, was amazing. i swear man, you never seize to amaze me...this is deffinetely legends material...even if they dont accept it, then there morons.

keep it up.

collab with me.

shit, just KEEP WRITING LIKE THIS.

excellent job. i might nom this...for legends.

[dafunk]

wow, this was beyond wack

I dislike this piece solely, setting aside the infinite amount of other reasons, because of the forced rhymes you tried to pull off. All fillers. And the internals didn't even flow right, let alone sound good. wtf is a no-viss
It was a giant filler to me.

Only talented writers get into the Legendary Hall, not backpackers who only think about multi syllabic rhyme schemes. Not saying you're not talented, but it doesn't seem like your writing is mature enough to incorporate other elements other than attempting to flow right.

Generic topic, rambling on about how there's a greater truth and that society is blind, same old shit...I don't see why it's being raved about, there's no originality

[Judge Judy]

shut the fuck up

[Engivale]

ahahaha at dafunk - apparently I couldn't fool him into thinking, he's too stupid. =D

[J-Oh]

Flow is immaculate on this one, I really liked how you ended it because not only did it feel right, but it felt like you got your point across. You don't usually see this much emotion in a Text drop, but to be honest, I think it really helped it. Dope.

[dafunk]

shut the fuck up

you shut the fuck up monkeyface

[Jon]

call me the bad guy but i don't get this piece really.

I like it, and to me it's the same outcome of every engivale piece, amazing. I love this guy and how he writes, but you didn't really trick me into thinking because i didn't get it i guess. I mean yeah you had some ill lines and shit, but was there some crazy concept i'm missing? Eng, PM me about it please because I've read over it 3 times... its killing me. but yeah, good job - and so far my vote would stand as legends no, hof sure. but I would REALLLLLLLLLY like to know what the hell is going on because i usually get your shit but this time I dont..

so please PM me eng.

rtf on Tim & me - Capturing whispers.

[Saint Louis]

wow, this was beyond wack

I dislike this piece solely, setting aside the infinite amount of other reasons, because of the forced rhymes you tried to pull off. All fillers. And the internals didn't even flow right, let alone sound good. wtf is a no-viss
It was a giant filler to me.

Only talented writers get into the Legendary Hall, not backpackers who only think about multi syllabic rhyme schemes. Not saying you're not talented, but it doesn't seem like your writing is mature enough to incorporate other elements other than attempting to flow right.

Generic topic, rambling on about how there's a greater truth and that society is blind, same old shit...I don't see why it's being raved about, there's no originality

ROFL!!!! What a idiot.



But yeah dude, this was fuckin' dope. The flow of it all slipt off of my tongue perfectly. No bumps, no grinds. So you aint R. Kelly, sorry Eng ..

lol. The wording was perfect. Placement was incredible every where around. Choice of words was incredibly done. Imagery was fuckin' beautiful. Painted so many dope images in my head. Not artistic ones, but undeniably dope ones. Emotion, cool. So in conclusion. This was my favorite read since I've joined RB in 2005. yes, I like it that fuckin' much. Keep writing man, we should collab some where down the line.

- Dagel

PS: You should return the favor by hitting up "Hell Spawn" for me. Thanks man. Dope Read again.

[Plexus]

I'm focused on the no-viss, beginner's must know this
Flow is rapid like gettin' mad at the motives ---

^^Well it was an attention grabber the no-viss part im not quite understanding of in which makes it seemed a little forced. Sorry if theres some meaning to it thats going over my head it seems to be going over others head as well. And Ledge man Your very right in saying that hit hard because the flow was perfect and the meaning I understood. But to say great job though you dont understand is wierd to me lol. Maybe ill say its great if i understand the no-viss part. Sorry again for it going over my head. Other then that I liked the aiming at beginners and the mad motives is new to me lol. It was good...just didnt get the no-viss play. The rest of the opening verse was great. A good set up with the question ending line.

"I Don't -- Give A --- FUCK!"
---and I mean that...
Lean back and smoke a spliff in a green wrap...
Let the notion drift and I'll open with the omen myth --
Soap and shit scrubbed and then drugged with an opiate...
Soviet ties from highs to lows to Karl Rove's,
That snarl those who would fight the Jaws of gnarled prose...

^Personally my favorite part. The flow and metaphors were great. And the i dont give a fuck part really gave it its meaning from the jump. Showed what your attitude throught was gonna be like. That last line was exceptional. Very well thought out I can see and just nothing short of a greatly written verse. Your word choice is always superb.

It would be enforced, but we're
FUCK-ING VOL-UN-TEER-ING!
I call it steering sheep to keep the people small and fearing...
It's all endearing, really, you're just ADORABLE!
As you support the will of these crooks and pay for their WAR TO KILL!!!
Are you sure you still feel like a patriot?
Save me it, you fucking moron, there's been a war on since Habeus -
Corpus, As they've forced this thought process upon you -
They conned you, if you're paying a bill YOU'RE A PAWN TOO!!!
Cuz money is fake, it's power that's real,
And every dollar you make just allows them to steal...

Your message here was very clear, lol and actually made me laugh because I could picture you kinda yelling this to people. A very good message that you obviously feel deep about. Telling ignorant ass people its their ignorance thats increasing our faults. The lines before the ones i bolded really set this bar up greatly man. And the bolded part was short and sweet and made me laugh.

Overall Eng i as well think this is HoF worthy. The overall message was just nice and the piece was obviously thought out and perfectly executed with the exception of the no-viss line which may just be goin over my head, but none the less a great piece my man...keep it up

[LedgenZ]

When I read Shakespeare or Edgar Allen Poe I don't always understand the phrases that they chose to use or the exact meaning of all of their statements, but I can recognize the beauty in their words. Sometimes it's just about the overall symphony of the syntax than it is about the sound of the individual word or note. And how is it weird that I thought it was tight? I mean...I just did, not everything in life that a person likes or enjoys needs to have a rhyme or a reason to it. *Shrugs*...It's just my opinion!

[Plexus]

Well i guess it was more the way you stated it i guess. It was almost like..."i didnt understand but it was dope" lol..thats why i added that lil lol shit by what i said. but word i get you..it was kinda the same way for me i guess. just that noviss shit