Sprung

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IT’S NATURAL THE PASSION BLISS FORWARD THOUGHT BROUGHT WHOLE

CONTROL OVER NOTHING IN THE SAME TIME AS HOLDING EVERTHING DEAR

COCOA TEARS SHRED THE MOOD TO REVEAL THE TRUTH

EBONY EYES BLURS RED NOW KNOWING WHAT THE THRID HAS RELINQUISHED

WORDS OF WISDOM CHANGES TO SONGS OF THE HEART AND YOU MELT TO THE BOOM BAP AND HIHAT CLAPS

WHO KNEW WHAT COULD BE ATTAIN BETWEEN THE SHEET AND WRAPPED IN A CLOUD WONDER OF UNCERTAINTY

MY HAIR FOLLICALS STAND WITH GUIDED RADARS HOPE TO LOCK AND TARGET THE INNER YOU

WHAT LAST NIGHT AS GIVEN BIRTH TO HAS NOW FLOURISH IN TO MORNINGS GLORY

DAY BREAKS AND SPLINTER INTO OUR NEXT FUTURE

SOUL VIBES YEARN LIKE VICES OF A STARVE SNACKER FROM NUTRITION

I NEEDED WHAT YOU CONCEEDED

THE TOES FIDGET WITH CHATTERLING OF SMOOTH CARPET BURNS AND FRESH CARAMEL SWEAT

EROTICA HAS TO LOOK UP TO SEE WHO WE ARE

I SHOW A SMILE FASHIONABLY LATE TO LET YOU KNOW THAT YOU ROCK MY SYSTEM

EVENT LEVEL EXSTINCTION HAS BROUGHT ME TO THE OUTER TO SAY TO YOU THAT WINDS WILL NEVER CHILL, NIGHT WILL NEVER COVER AND THE SUN SHALL NEVER BURN AGAIN

MY DEAREST BEING YOU ARE THE DIVIDE BETWEEN LOVE AND HATE

LOVING THE FACT THAT YOU ARE HERE AND HATING THAT YOU WILL LEAVE SOON

SO AS YOU STEP AWAY REMEMBER THE FIRE

REMEMBER THE CONNECTION
AND

REMEMBER ME

I AM SPRUNG

[Neruda II]

Ok, next time write it out correctly. Turn cap lock off. Fix your structure, it needs a lot of work. The structure is such that I couldn't read more than half of the poem. I liked some of what I read, but a lot of it was all over the place. You need a bit of cohesiveness my friend. I do see potential if you just fixed a few things. Much love and keep it up.