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This kid is a disgrace safe to say hes a natural disaster
When it comes to losing hes a master...................
................he cant afford a car so he sticks to drivin his tractor
Different factors cause this bitch to lose, this dudes a newb
Not to be crude, this kid is prude.................
...........even if he was wit his gf nude, he never get screwed
But sorry to fuck that up, cuz kid battlin me you acctually are
Even if you have an alias, this mutha fucka wouldnt pass me far
Leave this kid scarred, hard to say this kid can have potential
Intentially beatin this fag, your the opposite of quintessential
I hate kids like you, if i asked him if he posted, he'd say he hasn't
For me rappin is a habit, his is just simply being a fagget
No talent seen, no even in the wildest dreams, highly obscene
I'll watch this dude fall deep, like he was a submarine
I'll sit back grab some popcorn, watch this fucker plummet
I love it, cuz i'm so sick that its makin this pussy sick to his stomache
easy 14.
My textes are wreckless, so I wreck kids, im telling u not to test this
And im a sexist, and you’re a bitch so im not afraid to lyrically slap you sensless
I read some of your old verses and their hard to swallow like a can of propane
Your still lame, and my ill game is leaving you sick and weezy baby, and I don’t mean lil wayne
I bet you can’t breathe, your drowning in my rhymes like your name is Harry Houdini
Pretty soon you’ll be fleeing cuz I just left a dent in your game like lance’s Lamborghini
You were pretty quick to spit your verse, was it saved on Microsoft word, ur being ignored man
O Lord, he’s callin me a fagget when he’s the one trading votes for blowjobs when he can’t afford them*
I’m sick and tired of using technology to lyrically bake you like chicken cordon blue
If your girl is telling me that she wants it its because in rap im stronger than you*
*he trades votes for blowjobs when he can’t pay for them cuz that’s the only way he gets pussy
*the lines are involving the 50 cent and kanye battle
iight nice drop..lets get some votes............................................. ...................
u too lets go vote up................................................ ................................
This kid is a disgrace safe to say hes a natural disaster
When it comes to losing hes a master...................
................he cant afford a car so he sticks to drivin his tractor
eeh weak...
Different factors cause this bitch to lose, this dudes a newb
Not to be crude, this kid is prude.................
...........even if he was wit his gf nude, he never get screwed
multis but no punch.
But sorry to fuck that up, cuz kid battlin me you acctually are
Even if you have an alias, this mutha fucka wouldnt pass me far
nah.
Leave this kid scarred, hard to say this kid can have potential
Intentially beatin this fag, your the opposite of quintessential
def not feeling this.
I hate kids like you, if i asked him if he posted, he'd say he hasn't
For me rappin is a habit, his is just simply being a fagget
weak.
No talent seen, no even in the wildest dreams, highly obscene
I'll watch this dude fall deep, like he was a submarine
a punch but not a heavy hitter.
I'll sit back grab some popcorn, watch this fucker plummet
I love it, cuz i'm so sick that its makin this pussy sick to his stomache
eeeh ending, no punch.
you def didnt have no punches besides 1 with an aight flow and 1 bar that had multis.
My textes are wreckless, so I wreck kids, im telling u not to test this
And im a sexist, and you’re a bitch so im not afraid to lyrically slap you sensless
multis was a aight punch.
I read some of your old verses and their hard to swallow like a can of propane
Your still lame, and my ill game is leaving you sick and weezy baby, and I don’t mean lil wayne
decent.
I bet you can’t breathe, your drowning in my rhymes like your name is Harry Houdini
Pretty soon you’ll be fleeing cuz I just left a dent in your game like lance’s Lamborghini
eeh..
You were pretty quick to spit your verse, was it saved on Microsoft word, ur being ignored man
O Lord, he’s callin me a fagget when he’s the one trading votes for blowjobs when he can’t afford them*
some gay disses are aight but this one wasnt so good.
I’m sick and tired of using technology to lyrically bake you like chicken cordon blue
If your girl is telling me that she wants it its because in rap im stronger than you*
eeeh ending.
you def had more punches and was more creative, aight flow but you can still work on ya punches and set up and have a bigger effect when you use them.
winner: the natrual
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This kid is a disgrace safe to say hes a natural disaster
When it comes to losing hes a master...................
................he cant afford a car so he sticks to drivin his tractor
nah
Different factors cause this bitch to lose, this dudes a newb
Not to be crude, this kid is prude.................
...........even if he was wit his gf nude, he never get screwed
nah...but ok multis
But sorry to fuck that up, cuz kid battlin me you acctually are
Even if you have an alias, this mutha fucka wouldnt pass me far
nah
Leave this kid scarred, hard to say this kid can have potential
Intentially beatin this fag, your the opposite of quintessential
meh..
I hate kids like you, if i asked him if he posted, he'd say he hasn't
For me rappin is a habit, his is just simply being a fagget
nah aint really hit
No talent seen, no even in the wildest dreams, highly obscene
I'll watch this dude fall deep, like he was a submarine
nah
I'll sit back grab some popcorn, watch this fucker plummet
I love it, cuz i'm so sick that its makin this pussy sick to his stomache
nah
vs.
My textes are wreckless, so I wreck kids, im telling u not to test this
And im a sexist, and you’re a bitch so im not afraid to lyrically slap you sensless
meh...but stretched
I read some of your old verses and their hard to swallow like a can of propane
Your still lame, and my ill game is leaving you sick and weezy baby, and I don’t mean lil wayne
nah..ok multis tho
I bet you can’t breathe, your drowning in my rhymes like your name is Harry Houdini
Pretty soon you’ll be fleeing cuz I just left a dent in your game like lance’s Lamborghini
nah..stretched too
You were pretty quick to spit your verse, was it saved on Microsoft word, ur being ignored man
O Lord, he’s callin me a fagget when he’s the one trading votes for blowjobs when he can’t afford them*
eh..nice try but nah...and stretched
I’m sick and tired of using technology to lyrically bake you like chicken cordon blue
If your girl is telling me that she wants it its because in rap im stronger than you*
nah..
yo - you need to elevate some more..develop some hard punches cuz i didnt really see any in your verse..no hate or nothin but i mean read some LLL battles or somethin...and i kno you kno how this text battlin works
the natural - elevate some more too..and stop stretching out all your lines..use less words..like use commas or periods but your verse did have a sort of a punch in it..so thats why you got this win today, but if yo wouldve dropped better then he wouldve got it
V. the natural
yo- i dindnt like alot of your punches but they were in my opinion on par with your oponents, your flow was ok, and your structure was ok, the reason i think you win is because your verse had a better flow, better structure and was better in every category except the puchlines which i felt were pretty even and both sides really need to work on.
natural- i think i see some potential, but you need to work at it homie, your lines are way too stretched.....the only reason you lose is cuz of your structure fucking everything up, had you done it right...i dont know who i wouldve chosen cuz it would of been close, not to meanthis was a good battle cuz yall both need to elevate alot but still, you need to drop more organized next time.
v/ yo for a better verse
if you guys can plz hit up the 2 following links, if you hit both ill vote honestly on the next 2 open battles of yours i see.....
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...re-348317.html
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...al-347869.html
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common lets get some votes in upppin............................................ .................................................
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c'mon dont sleep on this. vote up and leave links. ill hit them up!...................................
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please hit this
i have already voted in this battle.
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