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    Nimrods Pulpit

    Nimrods Pulpit






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    Place ya hands forth for the prophetic legacy of Abraham
    Raising a stand to expose the weakness of pagan man
    Audacious scammers, Nimrods clan mocked a major plan
    Building a tower to speak to GOD beyond the moons of Jupitor
    Like pre school kids criticizing the rules of the universe
    Ya will be taught a lesson kids and one that truly hurts
    Be cautioned in full proportion, do not abuse this earth
    Choose ya verbs carefully or invoke an inhuman curse
    Quit peddling idols and selling lies to the foolish persons
    We demand to Hear he who be preaching freedom of man…
    The mental slave is easy to trade and easy to keep him at hand
    Your plans will destroy humanity before it even began


    Nimrod
    I Subjugate there sons and even rape his mother before him
    Ignorance is key for a king like me to rule without forcing
    So keeping the minds pre occupied is the reason idols are important
    Your lessons preach an open mind but you see I’ll ignore’em
    What I say goes and I say no to you teaching the masses
    You bring food for thought but only my hand will be feeding these asses
    Beating you battered if you attempt to put ya preaching to practice
    Let these people die beneath me but know that I’m keeping my status


    Abraham
    To hell with you and your soul homie but I am speaking what matters
    And Nimrod be warned that your land will be turned over like apple pie
    You aint immortal your spats a lie, every monarch has to die
    I say my Lord grants life and causes death
    u claim u decide who lives by your laws addressed
    Likewise you decide who forfeits breath
    With your torture set and tyranny more or less
    Ya heads full of rock statues man don’t let karma catch you
    Quit stalling ancient homeboy you know time forces the facts through
    Quit while you’re a head. Not at deaths door when you have to
    Good shouldn’t be rejected! But you only pursue evil
    Just check your chain of deeds fool and your suffering people
    You’ve been cruel to these folk, real Black Death lethal
    Executions, idol peddling, brain washing and miss direction
    Teaching Hate for morals and love of lust but I ask you a question
    What will be the result produced by your recipe selection


    Nimrod.
    Cease with your beefs Abraham. I’m building a tower to the heavens
    You claim your Gods superior to me but I plan to beat him at wrestlin
    When I come back with proof of glory I’ll end you and all your questions
    I’m fretting at the idea that you’d try to teach me a lesson
    Ya pressin ya luck Abraham You aughta watch who your addressin
    I’m guessin you learn ya lesson when I burn your ass alive
    See your God save you then tied down, gagged and fried,
    His prophet that was a loss yo at least he’d be glad you tried


    Abraham
    What’s this I here, a haughty king challenging GOD
    A dim log. No one knows what the problem with this king was
    Delusions of grandeur control this king named Nimrod
    The Sustainer, My Lord raises the sun from, the east
    So bring it from the west if you dare to complete
    Forget the grief of this tower task that you’ll never complete
    Statues couldn’t help themselves. And they can’t help worshippers
    Teach people truth undisguised buy philosophers
    Pray to the maker of man and not man made ornaments
    I dance in your fire pit moonwalk styles but no screams
    Smoke screens wont prevent me, I’ll expose ya schemes
    Filthy lies be your ally, Even ablaze I’m so clean
    Your statues are defenceless just like there shmo king
    Your far from reality and your kingdoms end is encroaching
    You open ya self to opposing God, see you lose in the closing
    So Be you an example for every arrogant haughty king
    Choke to death on a miniscule gnat like a naughty chimp.


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    This was a solid drop here Morbid....and I'd have to say that I'm impressed..you had a great flow..in this and the whole take on the concept had a lot of originality to it..the content was deep and well thought out..I mean the whole food for thought..and my hand will feed. them..then abrahams response..with the which recipie chose thing was kinda tight...you had a lot of emotion scattered through out this piece..IDK why this is being slept on..because it's a pretty good read...but length can sometimes scare a reader away...but overall good drop man..keep writing...

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    Quote Originally Posted by Ntalek View Post

    This was a solid drop here Morbid....and I'd have to say that I'm impressed..you had a great flow..in this and the whole take on the concept had a lot of originality to it..the content was deep and well thought out..I mean the whole food for thought..and my hand will feed. them..then abrahams response..with the which recipie chose thing was kinda tight...you had a lot of emotion scattered through out this piece..IDK why this is being slept on..because it's a pretty good read...but length can sometimes scare a reader away...but overall good drop man..keep writing...
    Thanks heaps N .. will definately RTF...This is the verse i got DQ'd with Vs Paramik so you can see why I was pissed, hence the rage verse is SS. Hard work ignored sucks
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    Re: Nimrods Pulpit

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    Re: Nimrods Pulpit

    dope verse homie. intro was cool, even without it though the piece would still be as good as it is now. anyway, flow was the shiznat all the way through, nothing forced. dope concept, for the most part I enjoy Biblical themes especially ones done well like these. you really got it feeling like an actual rap battle and to think that this could have happened is even humorous to some degree, which i like. giving sort of an urban view to an event of old and nothing like it was a great idea man. keep writing homie.

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    Re: Nimrods Pulpit

    Hey, nice approach on the concept and shit, the whole battle rap idea was cool... the characteristics between both nimrod and abraham were different and it showed not only thru content but rhyme-scheme. I liked the flow to it as well. I think what this piece was missing was a more meaningful story, i just couldn't find the main idea except that two men in power are arguing and shit... but really i can tell it gets deeper than that but i just didnt catch on. I think the way you ended it felt incomplete, like there really wasnt any closure, but it was still dope.

    creative drop, ill be reading more from you..

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    Re: Nimrods Pulpit

    Quote Originally Posted by Ace of Aces View Post
    dope verse homie. intro was cool, even without it though the piece would still be as good as it is now. anyway, flow was the shiznat all the way through, nothing forced. dope concept, for the most part I enjoy Biblical themes especially ones done well like these. you really got it feeling like an actual rap battle and to think that this could have happened is even humorous to some degree, which i like. giving sort of an urban view to an event of old and nothing like it was a great idea man. keep writing homie.

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    Re: Nimrods Pulpit

    Hmmm, interesting, I like this drop here. Nice drop indeed you had some great creativity here man, and the imagery was on point like hell man you did a great job getting the point across, a bit complex and I like complex shit that makes people think and stuff like that. You had a great way to express some biblical events and things and some great imagery, all I can say is great drop man, keep it up.
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    I Liked

    Place ya hands forth for the prophetic legacy of Abraham
    Raising a stand to expose the weakness of pagan man
    Audacious scammers, Nimrods clan mocked a major plan
    Building a tower to speak to GOD beyond the moons of Jupitor
    Like pre school kids criticizing the rules of the universe
    Ya will be taught a lesson kids and one that truly hurts
    Be cautioned in full proportion, do not abuse this earth
    Choose ya verbs carefully or invoke an inhuman curse

    And

    What I say goes and I say no to you teaching the masses
    You bring food for thought but only my hand will be feeding these asses
    Beating you battered if you attempt to put ya preaching to practice
    Let these people die beneath me but know that I’m keeping my status

    Also

    I say my Lord grants life and causes death
    u claim u decide who lives by your laws addressed
    Likewise you decide who forfeits breath
    With your torture set and tyranny more or less
    Ya heads full of rock statues man don’t let karma catch you
    Quit stalling ancient homeboy you know time forces the facts through
    Quit while you’re a head. Not at deaths door when you have to
    Good shouldn’t be rejected! But you only pursue evil
    Just check your chain of deeds fool and your suffering people
    You’ve been cruel to these folk, real Black Death lethal

    And Finally.

    Your far from reality and your kingdoms end is encroaching
    You open ya self to opposing God, see you lose in the closing
    So Be you an example for every arrogant haughty king
    Choke to death on a miniscule gnat like a naughty chimp.

    All in all this was a really nice read man. Interesting plot of the sort. my first Open Mic read, and it was nice. Keep at it and hit up "The Heart Is Young" by me and Ghost Element please.
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    I Am Never Wrong.

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    Bump... I always RTF
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    shit was dope fam nice drop fo real! 8/10

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    Bump.. And please leave decent feed.
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    Re: Nimrods Pulpit

    ''What I say goes and I say no to you teaching the masses
    You bring food for thought but only my hand will be feeding these asses
    Beating you battered if you attempt to put ya preaching to practice
    Let these people die beneath me but know that I’m keeping my status
    I say my Lord grants life and causes death
    u claim u decide who lives by your laws addressed
    So Be you an example for every arrogant haughty king
    Choke to death on a miniscule gnat like a naughty chimp''

    Cool lines^, the flow was decent throughout. Creativity was nice too, pretty original flip on the topic. You had very little multies but you made up for that by how descriptive you wrote the piece, the imagery as a whole was vivid. Maybe try add more internals, & multies, yet don't sacrifice your imagery, like, incorporate both skills. Anyway, nice drop.

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    Upping this. Thanks for following the rules.

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