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    The Intellectual Artist - & Nique, Engivale, Ledge

    "The Intellectual Artist"
    By: Jonathon, LedgenZ, Nique., & Engivale

    The task isn't daunting when
    You bask in the wrong thing,
    It's greed that can mislead a good man when he's drawing...


    The wise mind of this old timer, who was blinded by artistic measures
    Tries to find whats hiding behind his fine canvas of sadistic pleasures
    For a minute he treasures what's in it, as he gestures for perfection
    Colors dab in smidges, as it fixes together in sections; the reflection
    Catches his eye - in suprise, the canvas bleeds with utter needs
    Of supplies to cover greed with innocence, as the artist mutters pleads
    His patience; unbelievable, his creation shows perfection is achievable
    He celebrates with grace, and knows his complexion is inconceivable

    Pictures turn to words...
    Like liquors encouraged nerves
    To fire at light speed or invite need --- but which is worse?


    He’s the artist we’ve all known to paint a thousand words
    In every picture there’s a scripture, sounds emerge
    Within the mixture, found absurd yet still sublime
    And every word he stirs within stands still in time
    Still his mind thinks in colors, his body speaks with music
    And he sees the lack of creativity leaking through it
    He sees the people’s movements and he stands motionless
    Both his mind and heart focused on the potion his
    Strokes insist that the crowd doesn’t know he exists
    Yet his focus slips, he spits rain drops every time he blows a kiss
    You don’t notice this, though it seems quite overstated
    You’re still just a note in the symphony of life that he’s created

    The artist's proposal is
    The hardest for flows to fill
    Unwritten lines when the mind's feeling emotional...


    When we're down from oppression, she's found as refreshing..
    No beat can drown out her sound, from the pound of her message
    Well-rounded perfection; grasps dimensions of life's essence..
    With mic presence that grabs attention that makes Christ jealous
    Fights rebellious - words are potent and open to all
    And no marketing scheme could overpower her voice for the cause
    Poisoned and gnawed at by commercialized rapturous vultures
    But the empire of her words build an immaculate sculpture
    Not a rapper, but lover - with intellect in grand schemes
    Making love to Hip Hop.. cultivating in a man's dreams

    So we sit and we draw,
    Sing and spit at the law
    That says it all begins through a sip of the straw...
    We try to express self
    And it's why we address health
    Of the mind that's confined in a depressed hell...


    The cage isn't rattled,
    It's observed and described...
    We all create our own prison to live in our mind...


    Order:
    Jonathon
    LedgendZ
    Nique.

    Engivale in itallics
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    Re: The Intellectual Artist - & Nique, Engivale, L

    Props to all on this one...This was all set up very well. I am loving the PoV you all took with this. I rather enjoy writing about myself in 3rd person. Plus you all use good ideas and thoughts portraying yourselves. Its a well organized and put together piece, keep writing.
     

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    Re: The Intellectual Artist - & Nique, Engivale, L

    Jon, you really did a good job of getting into your character. The wording was spot on, except I think you meant "sadistic", not "sadist." Great imagery and nice rhyme scheme. Legendz, I really enjoy your style, very unique. One thing I noticed about it is that you start of with one simple line, then the next line is also simple with the a multi-syllabic ending, then the third line uses the multie from the first and second line right in a row and starts a new line, great shit. Very nice job on your part. Nique, once again, you've done a fantastic job with everything. That openeing 2 lines was very nicely done as was the rest, but I really enjoyed that. I liked your way of presenting this Point of View the most, nice job, very good job. Engivale, you did great for what you gave, I wish somehow they could've used you more cause your shit was awesome as well, in such short glimpses. Good job by you as well Eng.

    HOF Worthy, thanks for the read guys. I was very impressed.

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    Re: The Intellectual Artist - & Nique, Engivale, L

    Quote Originally Posted by Mariah. View Post
    Jon, you really did a good job of getting into your character. The wording was spot on, except I think you meant "sadistic", not "sadist." Great imagery and nice rhyme scheme. Legendz, I really enjoy your style, very unique. One thing I noticed about it is that you start of with one simple line, then the next line is also simple with the a multi-syllabic ending, then the third line uses the multie from the first and second line right in a row and starts a new line, great shit. Very nice job on your part. Nique, once again, you've done a fantastic job with everything. That openeing 2 lines was very nicely done as was the rest, but I really enjoyed that. I liked your way of presenting this Point of View the most, nice job, very good job. Engivale, you did great for what you gave, I wish somehow they could've used you more cause your shit was awesome as well, in such short glimpses. Good job by you as well Eng.

    HOF Worthy, thanks for the read guys. I was very impressed.

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    THANKS FOR CORRECTING ME!

    Sorry bout that, I thought I had it as sadistic. Thanks though.
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    Re: The Intellectual Artist - & Nique, Engivale, L

    That was a very well written collab. I love the 3 parts of it included with a narrator. Very well thought out and planned.

    Jonathon - Nice verse and good flow. Your imagery has definately improved from the last verse I read of yours and it elevated your level greatly. I'm lovin it like McDonalds!

    "For a minute he treasures what's in it, as he gestures for perfection
    Colors dab in smidges, as it fixes together in sections; the reflection"
    -My Favorite Line

    Also, I think you meant "patience" instead of "patients". I think...

    Legendz - Well written verse and unique flow as Mariah. had pointed out. It worked great and your content was good. Nice Job

    "He’s the artist we’ve all known to paint a thousand words
    In every picture there’s a scripture, sounds emerge"
    - I really felt that line. It stood out to me most.

    and

    "You’re still just a note in the symphony of life that he’s created"


    Nique - Always coming strong. Your flow is amazing and never lacking.

    "When we're down from oppression, she's found as refreshing..
    No beat can drown out her sound, from the pound of her message"
    - I like how you approached it with some kind of rage/passion in your verse. Nice

    Engivale - You can narrate in anything I write anytime. That was great narration. Only given 3 lines between verses you still made the content interesting and getting your point out. Your conclusion was great.

    "The cage isn't rattled,
    It's observed and described...
    We all create our own prison to live in our mind..."
    - Very very nice. You used amazing imagery in all your parts.

    Great collab guys... and gals!
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    If anyone can breakdown my two last lines, you win brownie points.
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    Re: The Intellectual Artist - & Nique, Engivale, L

    Thanks for feed everyone.

    Niquey I'd do it, but I was in the piece =/.
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    Re: The Intellectual Artist - & Nique, Engivale, L

    nice collab here. the topic wasn't exactly etched in stone, and I can see that everyone did the're own thing, all being in the artists shoes. Jon did good with opening the verse up, and kept his flow consistent and smooth. I liked all of engivales exerpts inbetween each verse, cuz each one went well with the verse that was spit before it. Ledgends came thru with the most complex rhyme scheme that was really original to see, crazy multis. and noone flows as natural as nique can, brownie points would be your view as being a girl and making it in the game, since its practically all men taking over. great to see this collab happen, i just wish yall could have wrote to a topic that holds more interest.
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    Re: The Intellectual Artist - & Nique, Engivale, L

    This was fuckin impressive good job. The rhyme schemes were awesome this piece was definatly remarkable. Everyone did great I think Nique did awesome here the rhymes in his verse weaved beautifuly with the theme.


    He’s the artist we’ve all known to paint a thousand words
    In every picture there’s a scripture, sounds emerge
    Within the mixture, found absurd yet still sublime
    And every word he stirs within stands still in time

    My jaw nearly dropped reading this Legendz awesome scheme well put overall nice piece enjoyed it.

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    Re: The Intellectual Artist - & Nique, Engivale, L

    WOw this i a nice collab. With many great Writers. all the writers did well up to the potential.
    First of al I liked how you include evingales as illtalicss when it spetrates from the other verses. this was nicely done. The eomtino was real on this and the imagery was goood and flowed true like a story. I really like ledgendz as he had a different rhyme scheme that was very original to say.
    Nique did a very good job as always with her suberb flow
    so overall this was a good peice maybe worthy of Hof.
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    Re: The Intellectual Artist - & Nique, Engivale, L

    wow @ the feed this got so quickly. Thx to all the feedback givers, also nice working on the collab i had fun doing my part after picking thru all ur verses... good job by all, I'll rtf some tonight after work.

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    its an awesome collab wit great om writers what can i say.
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    Re: The Intellectual Artist - & Nique, Engivale, L

    Nope@ bob. You have to look deeper than that to understand the last two lines. If Hip Hop is considered a woman, and this intellectual artist I'm referring to is a woman, and I said that she's making love to Hip Hop cultivating a man's dream...what does that mean exactly? lol. thanks for the feed.
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    Your love of the game causes you to want to improve the game. To pass men, to teach men that women are equal and capable of surpassing man?
     

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