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    Hollow cost



    Learned with a furnice, burning.. it rates the oppression
    and flared whats held dear, Fear took place of obsession
    It ate my expressions, & fighting's a must... when many sing
    for hope and for hate, Jew faces look flushed of everything
    Severed, and cold.. blood should be shedded, I'm told
    so then they beheaded my bro, and shreaded my soul..
    my dead family remains in a locket, lost or locked in the-
    -safe next to the harmonica, glock and swastika
    Traitor or savior? but behind hitler's bodys' do I lead?
    I knew if I'd commit suicide, it's to take kamikaze nazis.
    because to be in a cluster, caught.. you ash to dust or rot
    & from the start, I muster plots from just the thought
    I trained to be my enemy, even my pride was captured
    ..died of laughter, my bullets aim at their higher stature
    so before I apologize, I toss your eyes, anthologize
    the rhymes done, dispose mien kaumpf & expose all the lies
    Rockets pass slow, hittin the lotto as I pop those
    Pockets pistacio, When I took the guapo from gustapo,
    corpses cover floors, people who I swore to love, adore..
    never asked for nothing more, than what made me a dove of war.
    to seek the truth, doing my deeds is doom, die avenged
    I fiend for food now that the greed consumed my revenge
    violence ends.. Allies are here to rescue the millions
    I had to step through & end mien fuera's sesspool of minions
    sworms of men, no common sence, only if ya'll had a voice
    wearing the same uniform as them, we all have a choice..
    & we have a noise, it seems.. born in deaths and tragedy
    screams, effective massively, preformed in depths of agony
    I die a thousand times, scorned, excelled by the horns of hell
    killing both sides, I became a dormant shell of my former self
    & davids rabid, enslaveing generals are peering a strict joint
    directing young children to thier death, wearing a 6 point
    loneliness of being a soviet, blending in as a mercenary
    its what you heard already, neverending wins birthed & buried
    urges heavy, and fighting it was for strictly thinkers
    a swiftly swinger, from the trigger to my sticky fingers
    jewels and gold are piled in auswitch, I wanted all of it
    in the dieing army of a hierarchy,
    the true meaning of a hollow cost is spent



    * An undercover soviet, and german soldier was spotted later arriving with his cold earned cash to the reminense of a battle already fought. and won. he walks the battlefield to greet the americans. they shot him on sight, thinking he was an enemy soldier. a hollow cost is spent.*
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    Re: Hollow cost

    WOW.
    This was a really good peice.I love reaading your peices cause you always have pictures describing the scenes that you write upon. This open mic had was nearly flawless in my opinion. The multi was superb and put nithe right places the imagery was mind boggling to say at that. The emotion was very well put his was one of your real great peices and i hope you stay writing.
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    Whoa dude,

    This piece was immense!! I've read a couple from you in the past, and have known you to be a ighly talented lyricist, .. This piece just blows everything out of the water!!

    The imagery, the smoothness of the flow, the multis, the internals, this piece had everything!!

    I would quote an exert, but I'd be quoting it all.

    A great piece man, .. Really like it!!

    up the good work.

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    Re: Hollow cost

    up 1, thanks for the feed guys
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    Re: Hollow cost

    Yeah I read this piece late last night/ early this morning

    I was just too tired to leave some proper feed.

    Look I'm not one to really break a piece down line by line
    and do a whole lot of quoting, i feel like if i read it, and enjoyed it enough to comment on it then the writer should no that he or she has done their jobs. And this piece here...this piece here...was a job well done by all accounts. I mean, what can i say? It was all but flawless. Any objection to this piece has to be based solely on taste and not techinque, because the skills used and excuted here are without mistake. The flow was perfect, the wording was superb, and the content - though dark and grim- was rich in detail with a healthy visual. Like I said my only just objection to this piece --- is the topic. I've never just been a fan of... as you put it "Hollow Cost" works. I mean I'm no moster I can understand the gravity and exterems of situations and things that they went through, but i've never really sank my teeth into it enough to be emotionally attached to their struggle. I dunno, I just never really dug these sort of topics. But then again, I can peep immense skill from a mile away...and well...your look more like an inch away at this point...cuz you've got it.

    All in all, not my sort of topic...but great script none the less!

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    Re: Hollow cost

    2... more feed plz.
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    damn.. leave feed and links..
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    Damn I just had to read it again.
    Its sucha good peice I nom'ed it for Hof
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    Word is born that was illy. You sarted of smooth and it carryed on through out the whole drop. it flows and the fact that its deep gives it a tension that cant be described good work b that shit was hot and ima be looking out for some of more of your shit son you spit that ether . props

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    4. I'll check out more pieces tonight
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    Re: Hollow cost

    wow.......that shit was nice. i read it and im new to the om shit but wow that shit took me by storm. very good man, you can tell this is waht you do and youre good at what you do. i was feeling it all the way to the end.

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    Re: Hollow cost

    This was nasty, man. You were able to provide a fresh take on an old topic with innovative rhymes and unique wording. This was an unexpected gem. Some of the transitions could have been a little smoother IMO, but on the whole this was an exceptional piece. Only regret is that this wasn't longer, it definitely left the reader wanting more, which is a good thing.

    "my dead family remains in a locket, lost or locked in the-
    -safe next to the harmonica, glock and swastika"

    I know it's not always fair to narrow down a summary to 2 lines, but I feel like this section embodied this piece. The way the alliteration went hand in hand with the imagery and rhymes was just ridiculous. Technical yet creative.
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