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    200 titles part 1 (200th Open Mic)

    Yeah, this piece contains about 90 titles of open mics i've written over the last 5 years. I might highlight them later if people really want to count. The link in my sig gives the complete list anyway.




    200 Titles


    A Desk in a Room in Downtown Liverpool

    It began with what a man proclaimed as his vocation
    A finger on the pulse with delusions and motivation
    A 15 minute keystyle spawned some 16 lines
    All in all a sickly rhyme off the top and on the grind
    In fact a random rhyme somehow in perfect harmony
    A subliminal message about what the spark could be
    Nothing fake on this notepad, bullshit battered and bought
    He picked up the fragments of his brain and gathered his thoughts

    “Ok, I’m setting the stage for this dojo of the flow
    A fusion of sparring minds and elevation mojo
    No broken meditation, we’ll induce a perfect trance
    Fuck an actual club verse, these words and verb’s dance”


    A hundred titles came to mind; in fact he wrote a part 2

    “No turning back now…”

    Infection in his heart through
    It was too much pain, hands tremor, this apartment is locked
    Jack exited the scene to take a walk round the block


    Roaming Thoughts

    What rain revealed outside was his mirror image
    Reflected in puddles, so angry, a clearer visage
    Jack philosophised, as he walked, on making a difference
    To use his God given talents without the Devil’s commitments
    Escape the village of the damned, demons inside his head
    Like an unwanted child from fiery semen he fled
    As the dawn fades, Jack stomps towards the sunset
    Lost in his meditation, it still wasn’t fun yet
    Pictured in his mind 3 kinds of mental resurrection
    First awareness, second creative, third; an institution
    A classic scenario, full of meaningless promises
    A quick key from verbal blacksmith’s and all their nonsense wit
    The storm raged, Jack pulled up his collar and reflected on last week
    How he’d come full circle, first as a bully who bashed geeks
    To lastly, a spirit walker, whose focus was from the soul
    Every deathwish aborted, and suicide his only goal

    “God, if the wall had ears…”

    He reflected sombrely

    “They’d probably rather run for cover than face my honesty”

    Soaked to the skin now by this quiet storm

    “The rain writes my poetry…”

    A picture he tried to form
    In the end, his sparring mind ducked into a bar
    Seeking drugs and how to do them, brain burnt up as a star


    Bar Interior

    The splash of floodlights had Jack feeling spaced out
    Mind blown from loud music, the jukebox faced south
    The feedback from speakers wouldn’t cease and quit bitching
    Harsh laughter split the air from backstabbers and sick women
    Jack’s vision was segmented by 64 lines
    Some creeping social infection perfected to a raw shine
    He slumped onto a bar stool, sweating from the inferno
    As very wack old rhymes caused his ears to burn slow
    His eyes glazed over, philosophising on black rainbows
    Trouble, final thoughts and life’s temporary stage shows

    “Am I demonically minded?”

    He whispered under breath

    “Or so plagued with weird dreams that there’s no wonders left?
    Maybe I’m an asshole or just plain not a fighter
    Who couldn’t realise his potential or stop spitting saliva
    Riddled with writers block, paper ripped that rises
    On the winds of change or other natural revisers.”


    It was time for him to exit and seek an exorcism
    To grab the knife by the blade, seek out some greater wisdom
    Jack felt cool night air hit him like the pyramid offence

    “This makes no sense at all.”

    He thought

    “But who’s got centz?”

    This was just the beginning on this artist’s timelime
    His evolution would soon take him to a true divine mind



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    Re: 200 titles part 1 (200th Open Mic)

    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...nd-338586.html
    BRAND NEW - Death on the Mind ..peep it.





    and now ..

    nice. probably not as nice as the sentimental value that writing this piece has given you. i liked how it symbolizes your writing over the years all rolled into one part of two. but at the same time tells a story of an artist and his progression in writing. you've definitely proven yourself to be one of the best over the years and this piece is that symbol of what it took. anxious for part two, though i knew the point of the story from beginning to end, you still managed to keep me reading. thanks man. nominated.


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    Re: 200 titles part 1 (200th Open Mic)

    Dude.

    This is a quality piece of craftmanship, as I have always come to expect from your good self.

    I don't think there is a great deal I can say about this piece to be pefectly honest, not that you don't know already.

    It is a piece of excellence.

    As always bruv, keep up the great work.

    Take care.

    Peace & God Bless.
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    Re: 200 titles part 1 (200th Open Mic)

    Cheers guys, uppin this.

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    Re: 200 titles part 1 (200th Open Mic)

    This is some fucking bullshit. Uppin, rep this!

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    Re: 200 titles part 1 (200th Open Mic)

    Your pen mastery, is very adept

    For excerpts from past OM's this piece was very cool

    “Ok, I’m setting the stage for this dojo of the flow
    A fusion of sparring minds and elevation mojo
    No broken meditation, we’ll induce a perfect trance
    Fuck an actual club verse, these words and verb’s dance”
    that "Verbs Dance" line was mad cool

    “Or so plagued with weird dreams that there’s no wonders left?
    Maybe I’m an asshole or just plain not a fighter
    Who couldn’t realise his potential or stop spitting saliva
    Riddled with writers block, paper ripped that rises
    On the winds of change or other natural revisers.”

    It was time for him to exit and seek an exorcism
    To grab the knife by the blade, seek out some greater wisdom
    Jack felt cool night air hit him like the pyramid offence
    Beutifull

    for being text you really have some flow and you can hit a topic well.

    I really enjoyed this piece.

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    This was pretty cool. I liked the diversity when it came to the various approaches to the concept at hand. The descriptiveness and imagery was very well-written and although it was a bunch of topics the transitions made this a very smooth and enjoyable read. Overall, this was very unique and a breath of fresh air.
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    Re: 200 titles part 1 (200th Open Mic)

    nice piece here, well written....

    "Maybe I’m an asshole or just plain not a fighter
    Who couldn’t realise his potential or stop spitting saliva"

    an asshole...hit n run

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