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    "Theatre of the Mind" - Jonathon & Dr. Limitless

    "Theatre of the Mind" - Jonathon & Dr. Limitless


    Thunderous applause -
    the whistling, and
    dropping of jaws. The
    curtains close, down -
    pours the wave of roses;
    with a swift movement
    like Moses. The path
    clears out, the audience
    cheers my name. As if it’s
    just a fake vision; within
    a simple game. But my
    magic is real; pick a card
    and, I’ll win the deal. The
    rabbit in the hat won’t
    come out, until ...


    My motion picture fixtures
    its vicous denchers,
    biting love in the bottom.
    Sighting temptations,
    flying around since autom.
    Flowers blooming,
    shooting up from their roots,
    to see if they'll suit,
    their patient viewer.
    Yet, death - comes sooner,
    stentch, squinting noses
    notice; they're approaching
    a metaphorical sewer.

    Lethal expressions; remise
    the crowd to turn. To despise
    my magical appearance. To
    compromise my deliverance.
    They fear my magic; they’ve
    saddened. I must be arrested
    for “False Impersonation” -
    lies! To the peoples surprise
    my artistic blood; dies. Arise
    the souls of a thousand magicians.
    As for my “Corpse”, justified
    that in my mind lies a theatre.


    When I find time to sit back,
    and walk the fine line of facts.
    Realizing what darness hides,
    and watch my thoughts glide
    as I lack pride - through the eyes
    of god himself, up from the sky.
    I try to disquise my face,
    and run away from this place,
    in which pain rains from the clouds,
    and thunderous words speak loud.
    So view this movie, play, or scene,
    hastely paste your heart to the screen.
    Scream! Fear shot you in the brain,
    but illusions of the mind -
    are insainly hard to contain.
    The lights brighten from their dim,
    crowds leave, happily,
    yet a few are left grim...
    A tragic ending, magic sending
    spells and ghost within me,
    Through the back of my eyelids,
    it leaves me excited,
    Who created this crazy thing?
    The sandman came,
    and created a dream.

    Dr. Limitless
    Jonathon
    Artificial.Intelligence

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    Re: "Theatre of the Mind" - Jonathon & Dr. Limitle

    Nice read. Rise up family.

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    Re: "Theatre of the Mind" - Jonathon & Dr. Limitle

    Don't be sleepin yo.

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    Re: "Theatre of the Mind" - Jonathon & Dr. Limitle

    uppin.
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    Re: "Theatre of the Mind" - Jonathon & Dr. Limitle

    Uppin! I Will Rtf!
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    Re: "Theatre of the Mind" - Jonathon & Dr. Limitle

    As will I

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    Re: "Theatre of the Mind" - Jonathon & Dr. Limitle

    This was pretty dope. I liked the way the two different styles complimented each other that was a pretty good match up. The content was str8 but i was feeling the fast paced motion of it all. It was really one of those pieces that draws you in and makes you read it to the end. Nice emotion and some nice metaphores from both of you. Only thing i would say was to try and not make it read like a paragraph, make it a little more rhythmic, doesnt have to rhyme. Nice drop.

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    Re: "Theatre of the Mind" - Jonathon & Dr. Limitle

    People like rhyming .
    Thanks for the feed.
    Leave links.

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    Re: "Theatre of the Mind" - Jonathon & Dr. Limitle

    lol i know, im just saying it dosnt have to, it just has to be lyrical ya dig
    Anyway my piece is right below yours

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    Re: "Theatre of the Mind" - Jonathon & Dr. Limitle

    rise.

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    Re: "Theatre of the Mind" - Jonathon & Dr. Limitle

    uppin.
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    Re: "Theatre of the Mind" - Jonathon & Dr. Limitle

    uppin for more than one feeder.
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    How fuckin hard is it too leave feedback on a peice? Honestly.

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