I'll just go off the top of my head here.

[Voice2012]

Have you ever found yourself
Setting all your dreams on a shelf
Waiting too long
For less than you wanted
All that shit
Others have flaunted
All my life been busy
dodging hooks and throwin jabs
only luck
kept it from
escalating to stabs
don't get me
confused with a fad
i'm different
i'm here to conquer not to play
i'm here to stay and my morals
never will they sway
i have none
look at me like i give a fuck
my words hit you like a mack truck
flat on the concrete you're stuck
and if you walk out of here alive
it's luck

[Alias-C]

"Have you ever found yourself
Setting all your dreams on a shelf
Waiting too long
For less than you wanted
All that shit
Others have flaunted" you man I thought you was going somewhere with this... I did like this part, but then it just began to fall apart... too short, simple vocab, simple rhymes, no wordplay... it's like you just gave up and said, fuck it...
You should have kept going with the idea of these first few lines... probably would of been hot...

Peace

[Voice2012]

yeah...i was tired and had worked all day...my mind was all fucking down....