Feelings.

[Messiah.]

Order
Thomas.
Atticus.
Mansin.
Baron P.
Tim.
Heychoo.
Engivale.

Twisted enchantments of a fairy tale.
Enthrawled through the eyes of a child.
Distinct phases of a surplus education.
Thoroughly played upon a canvas of mind.

It's hard to breathe easy with broken heart strings-
I've been singing my final breaths
for each step of mile I've said I'd start to pardon,
while learning it's just a little hard to live with
dry eyes after sitting in this barge of burning bridges.

I harbour thoughts like pirate ports black hearted no remorse
Yet light a course upon the shores of mental well explored
seek innocence left guilty ……. any means is my retort
know at its core a seed is born roots feed upon the spawns
Rotten, succulent and sweet………hypocrisy ignored.

Dark clouds shroud the lines of scriptures vandalised
I’m a vandal I hold the candle to burn my very line
of destiny- I messed the stressed notes of life abreast
to the paranoid convict dropping the knife on my thread.

The seed of hatred takes root deep inside the mind
Planting lies in time.. Shadowed thoughts of pride will wind
To the surface leaving a demonic figure.. You’ll try to find
Remnants of your former existence positioned in the relic
Embellished desires of blood grasp your head n swell it.

Perfect zen, paper friends, multi-million men -
residing, confiding, they find my mind inviting
just for a second of sanity, spare their emotional
vanity - dont call it my mind, call it my home..

I cease to exist without beliefs that persist,
What's faith to me is love; Basically bliss;
In my case it's miss, if it's that or a Hit-
I just wish these hushed lips were flattered with spit...

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=330051

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=330002

[P. Mortuus]

yup it's dope with the lil verses from everyone.

[D. Josey]

This was a good piece from all of you - a very nice collaboration that kept me reading through all of it,a nd I understand why you guys cut it so short, but nevertheless it was like an appetizer of some very good writers on this site. I had this weird image of each of the writers stepping foward and reciting different styles, and just different feels and takes on the topic. Excellent emotion on this one - the title was not a one track minded one, but an open one - good enough for different people to do different things on here and that's exactly what you did. I very diverse piece that I just felt so much, so good job guys.

- Exact

[Messiah.]

Thankyou Exact.

[Spoken]

this wasa good piece nice way to set it from each other to signify whose who and the way it shifted from stanza to stanza was nice and calm..nothing in this piece was what so ever forced nor was it over done... all came well with each other and you all were on the same page of what the topic was about and you all grabbed a concept and held your ground with your own twists in the story...i liked all the stanzas is was hella creative and i see this being the collab of the month for OM in the mag... all the writers in this put forth a nice vocab displaya nd wording everything nicely...nice piece here loved it. it was nice and creative...the shortness i ave to agree with exact.. it was like a appetizer for reals from all of you guys showing your diffrent styles mesha nd blend well together.had my attention and i enjoyed this read....keep it up guys definatly a good piece right here no doubt.

if you guys could
RTF.
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=329836

[Ntalek]

this was a great write for a collab of some of the top writers on the site...I loved how the emotions transferred smoothly to each verse or stanza while not really seeming to be a collab...more like a collage...each person brought their own unique style forth and that could be seen within the stanza's....the topic was great and I like'd how the difference's of certain emotions were display'd with great wording....overall this was a great read...keep it up and...RTF..

[Messiah.]

Links hit. Thanks for the feed, Uppin.

[Lauren.]

this was a dope collab, some of the best topicalists I know. I liked how each writer had their own style, but came together to create a harmonious piece. The different views also came together nicely. Every verse had a good flow, good vocab, and good structure, The imagery was cool, especially the use of words like succulent. I actually liked the length of this piece cuz it wasn't too long but it still held a lot for the leng that it was. Overall you all did a very good job with this hit up my om--Visions behind glass

[Messiah.]

Link hit. Thanks for the feed.

[HighEngineChief]

wow thats alot of people. the whole thing together was dope though. not alot of individual expression with only about 2 bars a piece but it was dope when you put it all together. I wish I had time to break down every ones individual stanza but i dont. Thomas since you posted it i will address yours.

Twisted enchantments of a fairy tale.
Enthrawled through the eyes of a child.
Distinct phases of a surplus education.
Thoroughly played upon a canvas of mind.

^^
Excellent metaphores and imagery. i like your word choice as well...

got a new Om so show some love
Links below

[HighEngineChief]

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...th-330194.html

[Messiah.]

Link hit. Thanks for feed.

[iTopic]

Good read. Good topic. I liked the Imagery most, kinda got side tracked into my own imagination...Good shit.

[Messiah.]

Thanks for the feed.

[Messiah.]

Bump.