In A New York Minute We Feel In Love And Lost Love

[noncentz]

this is very basic i know but i had to keystyle as fast as i could relate to the feeling so this is that raw underground style.


Have you ever felt betrayed?
is amazing how a few bit of words can leave another sleign
when you alone and whats spoken rips into your brain.
and you can visualize flames in ythe family photo frame.
when you find yourself exceptting the blame,
and your friends think your stupid,
all because you still havent removed that arrow from cupid.
and i know everyone has they faults, but you cant help but feel useless,
trying to make facts out of excuses.
and i still see the mental bruises, when my eyes close,
i turn camatose, wanting one more kiss the drug is to easy to overdose.
the word love seams like such a lie,
but feelings your deeling with have you victimized.
dont trust anybody just want to abuse, for the way you beeen used.
then the logic drops,heart stops,
even if for a moment , when you realize they the missing component.
i know it sucks dont it?
eventually you have to move on but can't
or maybe can but just wont,dont
think for a second id place you second
but im not even there, i been 3rd and felt like no one cared
its not an apology or regret its just im not prepared
not ready yet,not to leave not forget.
i refuse even though either way i loose cause you aint but my side,
but the choices made are for the best i was blessed after i died
another chance, thats what i found in you,
but you took that too, now there's nothing left to do.
except fight for what worth the price of life
surrender your whole eartrh for your whole earth but it aint right,
that i make the sacrifice while you move to the next
and im only known as the ex, im vexed, but happy to know you okay,
and be there for you even if it brings more pain day by day.
tattooo the tears to my eyes, errosion
cause i can never fall out of these deep emmotions.
so let me make a notion to rewind time and change your motion,
back to my arms cause as far as love there's no escaping,
so to prove my love i sacrfice it and sit here in my box waiting.

[noncentz]

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...45#post5546045
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...54#post5546054

[U.G.GOLD]

root root, real good peice...and i can see how it was pure freestyle... it looks like you just kept the lines in motion, not by the skill or talent of the piece, but i can tell from the metas, its obvious...good shit, real raw, real blunt... not so metaphoric, which made this sort of piece a good read, cause nobody wants to hear about love in this unrealistic, unhuman way...so i really like this one, and thanks for the feedback too.

aight, one.

[noncentz]

u.s by chance twin u want to collab?

[noncentz]

uppin

[fischgat]

i like it, you got a poetic tone holmes

[noncentz]

thanks

[.:~Digital~:.]

Returning The Favor

*EDIT*

Ight this peace was deep - And i liked how you expressed everything in thi piece - really nice touch with the emotion put in this - i especiall liked the lines
and i know everyone has they faults, but you cant help but feel useless,
trying to make facts out of excuses.

But i feel as a quick keystyle you should elaborate it a lil more - Make it sound a lil better and flow a lil better - i seen a few lines kind of stretched but it was really good - and i bet if ya took the time sum ideas could be elaborated more as well - like ya could go into explainin a few lines as an example of this one
but im not even there, i been 3rd and felt like no one cared
its not an apology or regret its just im not prepared


But for a quick keystyle good shit - keep doin wut ya do - 7.5/10

[Willy B]

word p man long time since ive read something from you fam, could tell it was a keystyle real raw sometimes thats a good thing not the best i seen fam but def good nice use of words went together real well and shit man dopeness

hit n run in full effect good to see you back word