Lyrical Elevation 101-G.O.D. Flow

[Rone]

So put ya hands 2gether no claps
And pray that G.O.D. will help elevate ya raps

So put ya hands 2gether no claps
And pray that G.O.D. will help elevate ya raps

Hip-Hop aint dead she just restin
Prepairin to let tha best in
Cuz most they rhyme wit no message
they need to elevate the skills
Like NBA Dunk Contestants
Nah I aint here for critiquin
No Rone not here for tha Beefin
I will continue rappin long as its truth that Im speakin
And I wont stop risin till its tha roof that Im reachin
Cuz all these emcees is under this G.O.D. like a decon
Thou shall not rap without meanin
Newbies dont get me to preachin
Yes Ima G.O.D. Im Great. On. Delivery.
Now watch how yo own seeds Lyrically mimmick me Biblically
I touch Minds Hearts and Soul ya seriously feelin me spiritually

So put ya hands 2gether no claps
And pray that G.O.D. will help elevate ya raps

So put ya hands 2gether no claps
And pray that G.O.D. will help elevate ya raps

Just rap real life spit not that chessey white shit
Most nigga arent Dope enough to be Jeezy's sidekick*
Now Im contradicting the words I said in Line 6^**
Fuck it yall raps worth niggas is 9 cent
I'll elevate ya verse from 1 to 99 percent
Yo skillz goin through tha roof doesnt make Line 9 sense^***
But a 101 to these niggas from G-O-D simply PRICELESS
Thou shall not put another artist before me
Or be forever cursed & scorned lyrically bye G.O.D. MC

So put ya hands 2gether no claps
And pray that G.O.D. will help elevate ya raps

So put ya hands 2gether no claps
And pray that G.O.D. will help elevate ya raps


*=cheesey white meaning Crack or dope thats all Jeezy rap about
**=Contradicted myself cuz I said I not gon criticize anyone in line 6
***=wouldnt make sense cuz I said I would elevate to tha roof in line 9

[Tim]

first thing i would lose from this piece the explination of the piece at the end. A good writer can write a piece and the reader should be able to get the message with no meaning what happend. so that is one thing you have to get across. Also it felt like you were doing some ramblimg that wasnt going anywhere.The whole feel seemed rush trying to rhyme for the sake of rhyming and some of it didnt make sence. Id also lose the chorus that you put in it. By know means im trying to rip you because Some stuff you said if was true towards your life i respect no hate but i would like to try to help you focus more on that and not the rambling just trying to help you elevate maybe if you read some more pieces here and OM so you can see what kind of style we have here on RB. Good luck in the future PM me next piece you write to see if you listened

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=327008

[vocabz]

I agree with Tim. The rambling in the chorus does need to go. I mean, dont get me wrong.... i saw some nice bars in there, but some either couldve been worded better, or the structure just wasnt good. I'll definitely keep my eye out for ya, and see when you drop. I wish ya luck, and welcome to RB.

[Sir Skiddz SoPhrenic]

Seriously, lose the explanation, I know you deem it necessary, but if people dont get it while theyre reading, then they dont get it. Trust me its happened to me a million times, and i dont even bother. You can definately keep elevatin, but this shouldve been more suited to audio, and people cant judge it as a written piece, because its missing various factors. But keep doing your thing is the best advice i can give