Dj... vs DIRT D

[Tragedian.]

Topical
24-30 Lines.
House Rules.
Due: 24 Hours.

Topics:
Murder Case.
Life's Puzzle.
Broken Smile's.
Shatterd Dreams.

[Tragedian.]

Check. Good luck kid.

[DIRT D]

mirror that..

[DIRT D]

Born in a world lost Searching fa'your niche
just wants to be a boss-
Ain't for taking no-one's shit
Can't understand why friends seem not to fit
Plans they dont' seem to get
So you wisely stop fuug-gin wit 'em quick
Met a lil bitch - Seemed like she changing thangs
Spat a lil game now you getting extra brains
blowing good, forgetting most of the pain
But now you back alone after being in the rain
Struggling on ya'own lil nigga need a stack
Ambitious as a rider, best believe that
Probably shouldn't say shit, cause these
facts run deeper then dick cause I'm a real cat
Not just thinkin that i'm shit - -Shit......
Disappointed tryina find where to go, what to do
Nobody gives a fuk enough to have someone to turn too
So u getting tunnel vision wit it
how i'ma get it
oh a whole notha mission - tireda bullshittin
Don't really need attention cause of the snitches
Everytime I look I never find whats been missing
Maybe God only listens - no one else can feel me
So I'mA walk this line until death comes and feel me
Kiss me on my forhead for I can't piece it together
Probably will though..if I could live for-ev-ver
Tears down my eyes - That don't mean I lost my touch
I'm just tired of hitting walls - Life's puzzle's hard as fuk
But I ain't giving up

[DIRT D]

i can'tdo this textshit..i got to get a mic or something...

[Tragedian.]

My bad for being late man, Can I have some extra time, I'll start my verse right now.

[Tragedian.]

A Charge To Keep.
By: Dj...

http://www.dragons-eye.com/bloody-girl-a.jpg
Killer's View.

…tap
….tap
…..tap

As my foot taps off the wooden floor,
“Stay put girl you’re going to be soar”
She struggles, so I give her, a knee to the face
Smuggled the poor girl…with a pillow case
Her body shakes, and yet I’ve only just started
Rip open her stomach; must feel where her heart is
Cold hearted, and have no signs of showing sorrow
Rape today, & leave the bitch bleeding until tomorrow
The smell of her blood is making my face blush
But yet her screams, giving my head quick rush
So I continue, starting to give her multiple beatings
Till my door bust open, so I ran, leaving her head bleeding

Officer Travis's View.
STOP it’s the police. Look a young girl? Shit, she’s covered in red
Bar up the house; call an ambulance; I’m not sure but she might be dead
I’ll take a look around upstairs,
Men, don’t make a move just stand there…

…tap
….tap
…..tap

Who’s that? I turn around and freeze in shock
A dark shadow, and now has the door locked
He grabs my arms…ties me to the near chair
Stuffs my mouth, in fear but yet he just glares
He grabs an axe, says…’one move I’m done’
I try to get up and try my damn best to run
He throws my helpless body down to the ground
Takes off both of my legs, to make sure I’m down

News Reporter.
"The police explored the downstairs cellar
and found a bunch of dead body’s alone
with some writing on the floor,
officials have yet to find out, who,
when and why this has happened,
we’ll keep you covered with the latest of this murder case, see you at six."

From The Mouth Of The Killer.
I turn off my television, with a thin smile on my face
Knowing no one will bust, this so called murder case

http://www.theonion.com/content/file...on_news986.jpg

[DIRT D]

ain't that a bitch.lol..I'm weak as hell..good shit .. 1

[JDoe]

*dj...-your picture and textual support was overwhelming, your topical bled out into the reality of life, and ripped Dirt's expressions out of the water; he had no chance compared to even the font changes and color coordinations set up with high levels of vivd imagery...honestly, this was possibly a top performance topical on your part...too bad he didnt really pose a challenge concerned as far as your piece goes...

*Dirt D- your depth perception doesnt seem to be too good...you understand the difference between a rapbattle and topical battle, but you dont mentally compreheand the depth in which certain emcees interpret their own versions of tales; you have the right idea, but wrong actions and wrong structure; your structure is 1st and formost which made the reader feel you were at a disadvantage; a topical needs special reference when in a battle; unlike OMs which dont require much specialty unless your going for HOF...you have a long way to go but are pretty good for being new to this...nice try but hes been doin this shit for ages...

V/dj...

[..IllThoughtZ..]

Very Lopsided Battle Here Folks, Because One Was A Dope Topical Head, And Other Looked As if He as Putting Out A Damn 50 Cent Love Song

Dj..-Dope Verse, The Picture Was Disturbing, But It Matched Your Topic, Which Flowed Very Very Well With Your Topic, And I Give You Mad Props, Because Your Elevating Every And EVERY Topical, Om, SS Battle, W/e. Overall One Of The Best Pieces I've Seen From You Daniel.

DIRT D- Nothing Really Eye Catching In Your Topic. Your Structure Was Very Very Plain, And Rhyme Scheme Was Very Poor, You Could Use Some More Bigger Vocabulary, To Upp Your Game. So Keep Trying, But I Can Tell You Don't Like Topical, Because You Weren't Flowing W/ Your Piece, Which Lached ALOT. So Stay Up Kid, And Keep Elevating

V/dj..

[DIRT D]

1 more for a shut out right.. can somebody give me a link to some forums that I read while i'm bored?

[Tragedian.]

Thanks, and no, it's first to 5 votes.

Upp and leave links.

[Tragedian.]

upp 2.

[Tragedian.]

You can't be serious.

upp. leave links.

[<Supreme>]

Dirt - ur verse was just -blah- there was nothing eye catchin and really worth remembering in this.. elevate, and keep trying, you will get better

D - this was a good piece, and the (scary) picture works with your dropp. carry on like this, you showed good skill here: good flow and rhyming and imagery

v/ dj