Death March (Old Write Don't Be To Harsh:)

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This is my first real post on here so drop me some feed back I'd really appericate it




Your Being Feed Posion As A Remedy, Marching To An Uneducated Man's Symony
Its Either Fight For Your Country Or Die Amongest Your Enemies
You stand out in the front lines, watching each step avoiding planted land mines
You Pledge To This Flag Just To Do Good For Man Kind
While This Katt Known As Are President Sets In A Comfy Estate
While You Fight On Or Wait For The Moment Your Limbs Are Carried Away In A Crate
You Send A Letter To Your Family Everyday, Hopeing Tommorrow Won't Be To Late
For You Final Farewell, Your Final Moments On This Earth
Just Give Alittle Life Into Freedom During its Birth
You Set Back, Strapped With A Stanard Issue, Whipeing Blood Off Your Hands With A Rolled Up Tissue
You Feel No Sorrow When You Slit The Enemies Neck, Abousetely No Regret
Your A Soldier, You Got Hand Grenades, A Boot Knife, A Automatic, Your All Set
You Watch As Friendlys Cry And Scream In Outstanding Pain
Come The Next Day All The Blood On Your Body Is Washed Away From The Rain
But Them Ghastly Haunting Memories Clutter In The Back Of Your Mind
With Each Letter You Write Home " Your Son Sincerly Signed"
Down In A Fox-Hole Waiting For The Opposing Force
Shots Are Fired And Now The War Starts To Set Course
One Single Bullet Hits You In The Chest, You Stagger As You Fall To Your Rest
It Only Took That Split Second To Feel The Blood Flow Outward From Your Body
Realiseing At That Moment Even As A Soldier Your Never Truly Nobody
A Box Is Shipped Out With All Your Belongings
Sent To Your Family, As The Soldier Tells The Tragic Event
Your Mother And Father Cry As They Know Your Life Was Spent
For A Ignorant Cause, Living Just Stops At A Pause
No Longer A Son To Care For And Love Just Because
Of Some Petite Events That Happened To One Man
Knowing He Was A Coward He Refused To Take A Stand
Let Other Helpless Souls Fight His Battle
And That My Friend Is Why Being A Soldier Is Just Like Being Cattle



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Uppin For Feed Yall

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Ight new here lol but i'd appericate some feed good or bad I dont care lol Drop it

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um, a little bland and boring.

Your lines were stretched, the content was alright, but with a lack of imagery i just got boring, just keep workin at it and you'll be fine, and stop talkin down upon your keep an up-beat motive, or else people will think it sucks.

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Ight thanks for the advice man appericate it