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    Soule
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    Anxiety Time.

    Anxiety Time
    By: Nash and Bell


    The hand knocks, jiggles and jots as it rides
    the counter clock counts as it goes clockwise
    surprised; I see it on a wall as my life fly’s
    while I'm going crazy waiting for anxiety time
    to cross a defining line, leading a harsh life
    reminding me of mine; an elder one I'd prized
    anyways ..back to my lie, a cage of white
    in my jacket wishing someday to be able to hide
    in a place I wouldn't have to cry to be inside
    now I smell and see these toilet stained walls
    maybe these men wont come inside if I stall
    then, so it's no lie at all; ending the flattery
    I'm not so crazy, but I destroy bits of padding
    This calms and makes me have a happy day
    Am I real or am I just a figment of all decay

    They say I'm psychotic, now isn’t that ironic?
    A 54-year-old man that's still on the chronic.
    I'm on it; the twisted mind I've been granted
    with eyesight, like a seed; it’s been unplanted.
    Damn it, I've been transparent like the parent
    of dying spawn and I've been arrogant.
    Baring shit, like the father of manslaughter
    Cuz I'm scaring it and wearing it like a daughter.
    With "Eat me" on my shirt, its my insanity
    That glares at me and stares at me, a calamity.
    That burns my family, its kind of scaring me.
    Daring me and swearing me to a hypothesis
    I've found my way but I've forgotten my prey
    My child’s play has gone overrated like a Shakespeare play
    Its fucking anxiety time, watch my ill mental rhymes
    I may live in a facility but Its not my turn to die
    And I repeat, its Anxiety Time.

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    Re: Anxiety Time.

    mines first, his is second

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    Last edited by Soule; January 28th, 2007 at 08:44 PM

  4. #4
    Soule
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    Re: Anxiety Time.

    There now leave feedback.

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    Re: Anxiety Time.

    The two verses went well together. They both stuck to the anxiety theme effectively and were fun to read for that reason. Some of the ryhming was overly simplistic in my opinion in certain parts like, "now I smell and see these toilet stained walls
    maybe these men wont come inside if I stall" and "I've found my way but I've forgotten my prey
    My child’s play has gone overrated like a Shakespeare play"

    Also, it was weird how one verse was 15 lines and the other was 17 instead of just being 16 each, but, thats fine I guess.

    Cool.

  6. #6
    Soule
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    Re: Anxiety Time.

    ...Thanks.

  7. #7
    Soule
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    Re: Anxiety Time.

    Up and over.

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    Soule
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    Re: Anxiety Time.

    Upps

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