Left those leather-scarred leathery fingers.
Many more before time expertly made.
Passed grasp and shared him.
Desire remained.
In a minute death came and lingered.
The future sustains, but looks grim.
Left those leather-scarred leathery fingers.
Many more before time expertly made.
Passed grasp and shared him.
Desire remained.
In a minute death came and lingered.
The future sustains, but looks grim.
It can be mathmaticly proven that the universe is both infinite and finite.
Very short piece, but it was weird. The relationship between the content and the mechanics of your writing was so contradictive. A lot of your lines, and the piece as a whole seemed very well put together, yet, at the same time there was tons of amatuerish mistakes, such as repitition of adjectives and improper punctuation. Hard to really break this down, aside from that there wasn't too much else to critique with the brevity. So yeah, curious to see the next piece.
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=319610
po'ethics /
abstanticollective.
Thanks. It's an exercise that I do that is very difficult. Word limit and pre-chosen words.
It can be mathmaticly proven that the universe is both infinite and finite.
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