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Thread: Hunger for more. (I.E. verse)

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    Hunger for more. (I.E. verse)

    Let the plentiful apple fall
    from the poet-tree
    so I may chew to the core of knowledge
    allowing my malnourished mind
    to whip up masterpieces for readers eyes
    to feast upon and endulge my love.

    Let freeverse cure my sweet tooth
    for all-you-can-write buffet
    so I don't leave the page
    without an empty plate of pure satisfaction.

    Let originality fill my craving
    for recipes to new concepts
    that blend entertainment with creativity
    and all gather in a platter of zesty art.

    Recipe Book: Entry 1; Perfect Appetizer.
    Contents: Haiku marinated in lemon juice and
    the slightest hint of tobbasco sauce.
    Note to self: Makes for poetry with that spicy tang
    that leaves the bitter taste of delight on any readers tongue.


    Let the menu to happiness
    fill its empty pages with mouth watering metaphors
    so this starving artist may become FULL
    with the love of his hobby.

    Recipe Book: Entry 2; Main Course.
    Contents: Freeverse lathered in writers favorites,
    rich adjectives and soul food sides of emotion and imagery.
    Note to self: Even the pen knows it's finger lickin' good.



    Starving Artist
    Roc-A-Fella !

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    haha, this was a real cool piece man. i had a few hang ups with some word placement, but overall i loved the little plays creative uses of older phrases and shit. a lot of these concepts behind the lines were just very fresh, and originallity seems to grow more and more scarse- so this was great. but ya, the only thing i didn't fully like again, was some of the wording and the lack of punctuation. if that were to be tightened up this would be amazing. you're probally one of the most promising writers around these days. your style is very reminisent of Mindless in the way you use that text battler type witt in your pieces, and the approaches you take. always looking forward to the next piece man, stay up.
    po'ethics /
    abstanticollective.

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    Thanks atti.

    Up........................................again.
    Roc-A-Fella !

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