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    Third Eye

    Dreaming of that face again.
    It's bright and blue and shimmering.
    Grinning wide
    And comforting me with it's three warm and wild eyes.

    On my back and tumbling
    Down that hole and back again
    Rising up
    And wiping the webs and the dew from my withered eye.

    In... Out... In... Out... In... Out...

    A child's rhyme stuck in my head.
    It said that life is but a dream.
    I've spent so many years in question
    to find I've known this all along.

    "So good to see you.
    I've missed you so much.
    So glad it's over.
    I've missed you so much
    Came out to watch you play.
    Why are you running?"

    Shroud-ing all the ground around me
    Is this holy crow above me.
    Black as holes within a memory
    And blue as our new second sun.
    I stick my hand into his shadow
    To pull the pieces from the sand.
    Which I attempt to reassemble
    To see just who I might have been.
    I do not recognize the vessel,
    But the eyes seem so familiar.
    Like phosphorescent desert buttons
    Singing one familiar song...

    "So good to see you.
    I've missed you so much.
    So glad it's over.
    I've missed you so much.
    Came out to watch you play.
    Why are you running away?"

    Prying open my third eye!
    So good to see you once again.
    I thought that you were hiding.
    And you thought that I had run away.
    Chasing the tail of dogma.
    I opened my eye and there we were.

    So good to see you once again
    I thought that you were hiding from me.
    And you thought that I had run away.
    Chasing a trail of smoke and reason.

    Prying open my third eye

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    nicely written, your vocab to me seem pretty simplistic,it still was an nice peace,imagery was good could've used some work,everything else was up to par but your emotion in this peace was nice you kept me reading i like the way you came at this topic pretty creative,seem you took your time and it payed off well done,can you rtf having an hard time getting feed on my ish.

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    i left some feed on your piece "Moody's Mood" i think. Thanks for the feed.

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