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Abdul Hassan
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Ok. Couple of questions:
1) whats prewriting?
2) whats a check?
Motherfucker you can't compete
With the hip-hop elite
Prepare for defeat
Yeah you'd better watch out, make sure I'm not irate
Cos I got enough small arms to take over a state.
Just type check and that kicks off the battle
And you asking questions is a definite sign that
you are prewriting old chap
check.
Seriously, what is prewriting? Im new to the whole online stuff, where I come from you just get on the stage and MC, none of this crap.
Motherfucker you can't compete
With the hip-hop elite
Prepare for defeat
Yeah you'd better watch out, make sure I'm not irate
Cos I got enough small arms to take over a state.
prewriting is writing you verse before the check.
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Check you got 20 minutes No show
if you don't show
I automatically win on a disqualification
20 minutes due after this check
CHECK!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !
Ok i'm done.
Motherfucker you can't compete
With the hip-hop elite
Prepare for defeat
Yeah you'd better watch out, make sure I'm not irate
Cos I got enough small arms to take over a state.
OK, commentary, here's the deal
I got talent you can't conceal
Or try to deride through your crappy rhymes
I exemplify hip-hop at it's prime
You can sit in front of your screen and say I'm shit
But youre a nobody, you've got no wit
You've got no class, yeah but I've got it
Its no surprise that you'll never make it
Big time,
So I'll toss you a dime
Cos you'll need all that you're gonna get
Maybe you'll have enough for a cigarette
In a couple of weeks
Cos you got no technique
The bullshit you talk it might as well be Greek
I'll fuck you up proper and steal your shoes
If you screw around with me then it's clear you're gonna lose
I'm classicaly trained in the field of rap
So you just shut up, yeah button your flap
Motherfucker you can't compete
With the hip-hop elite
Prepare for defeat
Yeah you'd better watch out, make sure I'm not irate
Cos I got enough small arms to take over a state.
20 minutes since your check...
Motherfucker you can't compete
With the hip-hop elite
Prepare for defeat
Yeah you'd better watch out, make sure I'm not irate
Cos I got enough small arms to take over a state.
Is this a repeat of what happened onna sig
I'm 'bout ta murder this Kid
And drop 'em off the London Bridge
You like working in bread factories,
His ass controllin tha buns
He ass and holding a gun
And after this battle,
He gone,
Hidin' inna hole wit' sadam
This ain't tha Taliban, we catch you while you salatin'
And let you live onna machine fo' tha rest of yo' life,,
.................................................. ......................like ben lottin'
Now stay off my north american scrotums
Or atleast hire yo' niece Fergie ta Hold 'em
sorry guys this was terrible.
saddam hussein - you have no structure, glory pucnhes, and really nothing goin anywhere, you need to seriously read tuts, and work on everything.
Comentary - you had an equally bad verse, with no struture, punches or any of that snazzy stuff. like i told the other guy read some tuts on text to see what works.
v. adul. for being less whack...!
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London bridge isn't in London. It was bought by an American businessman and shipped biece by piece to Las Vegas. He thought he was buying Tower Bridge. A fine example of your country.
Motherfucker you can't compete
With the hip-hop elite
Prepare for defeat
Yeah you'd better watch out, make sure I'm not irate
Cos I got enough small arms to take over a state.
OK, commentary, here's the deal
I got talent you can't conceal
meh
Or try to deride through your crappy rhymes
I exemplify hip-hop at it's prime
ok, I guess
You can sit in front of your screen and say I'm shit
But youre a nobody, you've got no wit
meh
You've got no class, yeah but I've got it
Its no surprise that you'll never make it
bigtime,
So I'll toss you a dime
uhh ok
Cos you'll need all that you're gonna get
Maybe you'll have enough for a cigarette
ok
In a couple of weeks cos you got no technique
The bullshit you talk it might as well be Greek
ok
I'll fuck you up proper and steal your shoes
If you screw around with me then it's clear you're gonna lose
no
I'm classicaly trained in the field of rap
So you just shut up, yeah button your flap
meh
VERSUS
Is this a repeat of what happened onna sig
I'm 'bout ta murder this Kid
And drop 'em off the London Bridge
no
You like working in bread factories,
His ass controllin tha buns
He ass and holding a gun
wtf. At first glance i could have sworn you said he was bangin your bitch or somethin.
And after this battle,
He gone,
Hidin' inna hole wit' sadam
NOOOO!!!!
This ain't tha Taliban, we catch you while you salatin'
And let you live onna machine fo' tha rest of yo' life,,
.................................................. ......................like ben lottin'
FUCK NO
Now stay off my north american scrotums
Or atleast hire yo' niece Fergie ta Hold 'em
ok
If I could, V/ Abdul
Weak battle.
Abdul - work on your punches, and your format, you'll get better. Your flow and vocab saved you.
Commentary - No. Just no. You need to work on everything, your format, style, vocab, flow, and ESPECIALLY punches. The only attempted ones I saw were played as fuck. Just keep at it and you'll elevate. Shit, I was worse than you my first battle.
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