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["lil Neefy"]

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By: My Random Thoughts. And Po' It.

Fight to survive
or survive to fight?
Matter it does not.
Or does it really matter?
Live to breathe, or
are we breathing to live,
in a dictators realm
of monopoly.

Tomato or Tomato'?
Questions sent spiraling
through answerless minds
reaping the benefits from
freedomless speech.

Wear your hair up,
wear your hair down.
Do you wear your hair?
Opinions' your stylist.

Mirror Mirror on the wall.
Is it you you see?
Or what you want the mirror to see?

Sit under the apple tree,
reflect on life,
or is life a cracked mirror?

Does an apple a day
keep the doctor away?
Or cause tooth decay.
Or let the other end of the worm play
on the hook so doctors can
reel in a new cancer today.

Walk in your shoes?
Perpetuating blisters crippling me
so i'm as miserable as you? ..... I think not.
I don't think,
or i've become opinionated
in this over-easy, scrambled
never sunny side up
omlet society.

Got milk?
No,
my bones are strong enough
to hold weightless pressure
from stress so powerful.

I'm lovin' it....
Society's future in the kitchen
making minimum wage burgers
from prosthetic cows
to feed the greed; Supersize that.

[Sing along now]
......And i'm proud to be an American,
where atleast I know i'm free.
And I won't forget the foreigners,
who made all my clothes for me..
And i'm proud to stand up!
On top of you,
because your labor means shit to me..
And I have to say, I love this land...
These lyrics were made in Japan...

Just do it.
Tie that noose tight
and drop waste deep in my debt,
as my taxes support
your families welfare.

Be all that you can be!
While your next pay check reads
"Date of Death: August 24, 2006"

Is it in you?
To be an equal
while Joe Shmoe
gets the promotion
and you drown in tears
of eviction.

Have I said enough?
Have I said too much?
"E Pluribus Unum"
in the Coke Machine life.

Remember that.

["lil Neefy"]

Sorry for the structure but .... Blah I like it.

Uppsssy it goes.

[soulstice.]

......And i'm proud to be an American,
where atleast I know i'm free.
And I won't forget the foreigners,
who made all my clothes for me..
And i'm proud to stand up!
On top of you,
because your labor means shit to me..
And I have to say, I love this land...
These lyrics were made in Japan...

LMAOz... that was dope

this concept was pretty nice, ripping propaganda a new one.. the emotion was there, and the metaphros like the omlet thing and the just do it bottom half was nice. i liked this piece... the ending lines were very nice as well.... i think you spelled noose wrong though... great job... my favorite stanza was the apple one... it brought a conceptual matter ot the table, and ti could be interpreted different ways.. good job

["lil Neefy"]

Thanks man.

Yeah, it was fun to write and I had hoped you guys would appreciate it..

Like Esco says... Elevations is key...

["lil Neefy"]

your right... I did have a typo for noose*

*goes to edit*

[Black®]

This was very good, different from alot of things i have read, it had a lot of creativity, and imagery in to it, a good twist on things and it was orginial, vocab was good for this type of piece, i also liked this line to:

......And i'm proud to be an American,
where atleast I know i'm free.
And I won't forget the foreigners,
who made all my clothes for me..
And i'm proud to stand up!
On top of you,
because your labor means shit to me..
And I have to say, I love this land...
These lyrics were made in Japan...

That was funny. You also brought great concept and a lot of emotion, this was good for someting very different then wat i normally read.

["lil Neefy"]

^ thanks good sir.

[Kalos Graphē]

Haha i loved that whole verse in Italics.. that shit is so funny cuz its so true hey? yo but on the real you really knocked this ball outta the park man... i dont kno much bout poetry but i could tell that it was dope and that you put a seemingly great amount of effort into it.. i actually think this is HoF worthy cuz of the crazy metaphorical use to go along with the propaganda and phrases that our pounded into our minds daily... it flowed nicely throughout, i dono wut poetry structure is supposed 2 look like so im not gonna comment on that... i found it kinda boring cuz it didnt rhyme, like that;s y i dont like poetry, y not just write a paragraph or 2 if your not gonna make it rhyme? but w/e i really liked this piece man.. and reading this i think u should join Engraved Penmanship ...

good work

nominated for PSHoF...

["lil Neefy"]

Bump.

["lil Neefy"]

Rise you bastards

[Jon]

Nice job.

Good poetry is hard to leave feed on it because it blows your mind. So I can't think of anything bad to say, so apparently this is good poetry. =/

Nah, really good job here. I loved almost every aspect of it, except the very first stanza, I was like.. "wtf y0?"..

Good job

["lil Neefy"]

^ Thanks..

Up.

["lil Neefy"]

C'mon atti, this is only waiting on you.

[Atti]

Haha, man, I forgot about it again; I just remembered when I came in here to check my own piece for new responces :hung:

I loved this piece. With this poem I really saw YOU, apposed to your more recent poems when I saw mirror images of other writers. This was all very uniquely thought provoking and left a very bitter and sarcastic taste in the mouths of all those who dare to announce a defined thought. Not much even to say, I honestly and truly loved every bit of this. The concept was creative, the piece was fluent from top to bottom, interesting, and was just very refreshing. Again, it really seems like you've found yourself finally. I'm really looking forward to seeing where you go with your next poem.

Oh, and... Hof.