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    Rage Of The Machine (1/3)

    First of three parts, don't read the others without reading them in order.

    Not inspired by anything similar to the title.




    A profound scent rose from the wall,
    a nasal bombardment of aerosol, as i let loose upon
    my night. Diesel, twanging the strings of my life, around me.
    I turned with a sharp flick, perhaps to snare him.
    That prying follower who ever approaches. Nothing.
    I ran...


    Below the Hill of Meggido there rumbles, powerful,
    It stands, invisible to all, moving breathless to nowhere
    Shining torturous body, ripping judgement upon mortals
    Angered saviours splash down upon the tallest point,
    The desolate raven climbs among this rusty mountain
    Amongst a populace of depressive mould, insects to a
    cold infinity.

    Armageddon is awake, it slumbers no more as
    He is loosed for a little season, to watch us move.
    Cautiously arising from his cradle, to peer through the
    veil of the storm, into civilisation, and it's rage softens
    stone, through a soothing of pain in the sounds of the
    beast, an Angel dies.


    I threw the bag away, bounding in great leaps
    through watered thunderous perfection. Every step raising
    the dark waves around my soles, ever refreshing to
    my body, and as the rain encased me in shadow,
    I am reminded of my mortality.

    I dash sideways into an alleyway,
    up,
    up the steps, the side of the building,
    down,
    down the rain fought back, i tired to weakness
    under the bombardment of heavens bitter hand...


    Assaulting shots of lightning spoil the horizon,
    Intimidating, blazing above the hills, and the
    Tallest tree I cannot see below this horrific
    Weapon, apocalyptic militant blasts from above.
    Fist to hard block, the drops came to a messy halt as
    The rain charged the arms of steel, shouldering its
    Presence above.

    Fatigue is a non-factor, peace is forever winked by the eagle
    Circling a prey that cannot be harmed, and the wings know
    That it is foolish; for the beast cannot be fought by such confidence,
    Only freedom upon flight, the kind that birds have, but not next to
    The machine. A resonating shriek from below the treetops tells the
    Eagle it is time to return home, to a safe shelter from the storm
    It is teasing.


    I stood breathless upon the tarmac roof,
    catching little more than water in between painful gasps.
    I felt the footsteps follow me across the street, dogs angry
    And they climbed after me. The clang of the steps being steeped
    Was hollow and impaling, though deep in the surrounding hills there
    Was another mechanical melancholy resounding the woodsmen’s
    Horn, and I felt it like no other sound - bound through my bones
    Like a hungry beasts jaws, my paint laden hands rose into the night
    And brought down the stars,

    And with them, the oceans of heaven unleashed fury upon my face,
    Racing a warning to humanity…
    PE|WV

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    Ok I read this earlier and I have to say I found this a very enjoyable read.I really liked this one and it is differant from your other works.What I thought was a big plus u in this piece was your descriptive writing.It really was very good and painted and amazing picture for me.Vocab was very well used and I like the way you didn't over use it as that can kill a piece.One thing I would say is that some of your lines were a bit streched for my liking but then again it depends on how you look at the.It didn't really effect my opinion.Overall this was a very good read.keep it up

    -Dyl
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    So far so good.....
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    Its how you land

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    I like the descriptions you use throughout your peice. You do a wonderful job at painting pictures with your words. I especially like how you described the smells and aroma's through the begining. It really set a whole mood for your work.
    I'm not back...I'm simply bored out of my mind.
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