DanielJameS Vs. U.S.P

[DanielJameS]

10-12 Lines
Blind Spit
Previous Rules Posted
Due 45 min from check...

[Kit Cloudkicker]

check check...didnt see this till now

and didnt know RB moved it to 150 characters...used to be 100

[DanielJameS]

yeah that shit is a pain in the ass...gotta drag the space bar and shit ha ha....
check 1...2.......

[Kit Cloudkicker]

People dont battle you, it’s like a word to the wise
It’s not cause there scared of losing
……………..But your verses leave them terrified
Begging people to battle? You murk shit? That’s pretend
Front Lines is from Big Boys
…….So Stay in BITCH Slapped my lil friend
Every person to battle you, there wins just grow
Don’t know what a herb is? Just look into a lake
…….Its the reflection that’ll show
It’s almost coming to a close, your loss is almost sealed
Your body might think your ready for vets
…………….But your text is playing in a different field
Now its time for closing arguments, but your verse is void
Because before I even said check for this battle
……………………You were already destroyed

[DanielJameS]

ayo,

my flows echo from broken homes...been known to inflict pain/
and lord knows...if this dude no shows...it's a quick slaying./
Claim ya flows are Sick....but sick is an over-statement.../
the vast amount of wack shit this cat spits is overrated.../

I leave u black and blue dog...that's how hard you'll get cracked/
but I can only smack you till your blue cause your already black/
It's battle rap........so think twice before yo ass react...
u say u schoolin fools...show me where the class be at?

I'l Spit one out.... quick shit.....u dip run out
Like when i pull it and the bullets in the clip come out..
It's gunsmoke...u done choked...this chump can't come close...
You couldn't spit a hot "rap" if you swallowed a blunt roach

[Wyte..]

People dont battle you, it’s like a word to the wise
It’s not cause there scared of losing
……………..But your verses leave them terrified
Begging people to battle? You murk shit? That’s pretend
Front Lines is from Big Boys
…….So Stay in BITCH Slapped my lil friend


vs.

Nothing

USP got this battle with better and stronger punchlines. He also came with a lot more personals. Both did have good stucture and flow. Daniel you didnt really have any good punches. Most of your shit was played. And take the "/" off the end of your lines, it makes you look like a newb.

v//U.S.P.

Link in sig.

[DanielJameS]

So sick of favorites...

[step]

"I leave u black and blue dog...that's how hard you'll get cracked/
but I can only smack you till your blue cause your already black/"
(ROFL loved this hahahaha)

vs

"Begging people to battle? You murk shit? That’s pretend
Front Lines is for Big Boys
…….So Stay in BITCH Slapped my lil friend"
(nice)

"People dont battle you, it’s like a word to the wise
It’s not cause there scared of losing
……………..But your verses leave them terrified"

(nice)

v/ USP more quoteables, more personals...

[Zaverian]

THIS WONT COUNT BUT I WANNA FEEDBACK & UP IT FOR YALL...

DanielJameS
my flows echo from broken homes...been known to inflict pain/
and lord knows...if this dude no shows...it's a quick slaying./
??? okay...
Claim ya flows are Sick....but sick is an over-statement.../
the vast amount of wack shit this cat spits is overrated.../
u not spittin any betta than he is...weak
I leave u black and blue dog...that's how hard you'll get cracked/
but I can only smack you till your blue cause your already black/
discrimination? i'm black too...fuckin herb
It's battle rap........so think twice before yo ass react...
u say u schoolin fools...show me where the class be at?
decent, but schoolin & class lines r played now
I'l Spit one out.... quick shit.....u dip run out
Like when i pull it and the bullets in the clip come out..
good flow & wp but nothin directed at ya opponent
It's gunsmoke...u done choked...this chump can't come close...
You couldn't spit a hot "rap" if you swallowed a blunt roach
best bar, opener had a nice flow...close had a nice punch also

U.S.P
People dont battle you, it’s like a word to the wise
It’s not cause there scared of losing
……………..But your verses leave them terrified
lmao funny line, good personal
Begging people to battle? You murk shit? That’s pretend
Front Lines is from Big Boys
…….So Stay in BITCH Slapped my lil friend
nah ya wording was off
Every person to battle you, there wins just grow
Don’t know what a herb is? Just look into a lake
…….Its the reflection that’ll show
decent punch, not that tough but it hit
It’s almost coming to a close, your loss is almost sealed
Your body might think your ready for vets
…………….But your text is playing in a different field
uhhh, that was ite....concept coulda been betta
Now its time for closing arguments, but your verse is void
Because before I even said check for this battle
……………………You were already destroyed
weak close, who doesnt say that in battles...its played now


DJ: decent verse if it was just a regular freestyle, nothing was personal about ya verse, you just came out with the good wordplay and flow....other than that, you didnt use anything special, lil creativity....only bar really enjoyable was the closer

U.S.P: decent verse aswell, only thing you lacked in was a substantial close, everything else was on point, ya personals were ite coulda hit harder but at least you attempted, and ya punches werent completely played...so they countered all of DJ's shit when you compare em, only thing you could do better is flow other than that you sealed it in this battle

if i could vote it'd be v/ U.S.P
keep battlin @ both....

[Kit Cloudkicker]

thanks for all the feed and thanks for everyone voting

word Zaverian..My closer was played after i submitted it and read it over...not bitten but played..The time limit was runnin out on the drop time so i jus threw that together

thanks so far..Keep the votes and feedback coming

[kid sick.]

Nothing really, basic shit..


vs


Every person to battle you, there wins just grow
Don’t know what a herb is? Just look into a lake
…….Its the reflection that’ll show
nice^


v/usp (better verse)


Other dude had nothing need to elevate and remove the / from your verse. One sided battle.

~1~

[DanielJameS]

uppin #1

[DanielJameS]

"Every person to battle you, there wins just grow
Don’t know what a herb is? Just look into a lake
…….Its the reflection that’ll show" This is a good line? Wow...no wonder i'm loosing battles...hoe, snow, show, glow, no, blow, is the simplistic rhyme style it takes to win battles here...and look into a lake? where'd u come up with that? U couldn't even spit this verse out loud on time to a beat witout choppin it all up.... let me show u how it should be worded...

"every body that challenge u...see their battle record gettin clearer..
never heard of an herb? check out ya reflection in the mirror.."

somethin like that would be hard....

[Kit Cloudkicker]

up #2

Mine was more complex tho..some ppl look for Complexity, not Simplicity...and i was goin to say something with a mirror, But i felt it was more newbish..So i added lake instead...and i couldnt jus say water, cut u can look into a glass of water and not see a reflection..so lake was Sufficient Enough For me...If you your reading it like i am, then there is no flow or anything lost..and yes i could spit this verse out to a beat..But we are not doing audio here..This is TEXT..Does that explain enough?

no hate

up #2

[DanielJameS]

You absolutely could'nt spit it out to a beat....and have it sound good anyway...but whatever...i don't know what i'm talkin about i've only been a musician writer piano player drummer guitarist...singer my ENTIRE life....wheres your recorded material you have any? do any of you cat's have recorded MUSIC...cause i wanna hear it