Confession

[Soule]

Dear lord hear me out,

I am sorry for all my sins.
But I can not enter this oblivion.
I am afraid of my familes will.
Are they going to miss me?
Or are they angered at my kill?
Am I their enemy?

I killed a young man today.
For the same reasons I speak for now.
His slaughtered an illegal animal today.
As a young man how could he?
It makes no sence and why would he?
Unless it attacked him first should he?
But I had to avenge the animal

It could not harm a thing
It was just a poor dog
Why would a human harm a dog
It confuses me dearly
I'm sadened clearly
Please for give me for I'm in a hurry
My vision is getting a little blurry

Are you angered at me for such a sin
Is that why I'll live internaly in oblivion
Or are you proud at your own win
That you will act as though your a viloin

As I fall into your internal dark prison
Will I live internal life in a sadness
For if this is the story I create
I must give you this one final confession

I am a Sinner

[Cody Nash]

i think the words you used here could've been much more complex, but nontheless, it was still pretty decent. you had a couple meh/WTF?!? lines, and your wording was really mixed, but overall good. poetry is more emotional then anything, and the emotion was present for the most part here. decen piece.

- Nash

[Soule]

thankyou.

[Soule]

Rise pelase.

[Liquid Content]

Your wording seemed to be mixed a little bit here and there like you misconscuid something or mix it up in translation, your vocab was good you could have used some more complex wording to make it appeal better for the type of read that i like but thats just my opnion. your emotion was okay, you could work on it a little bit. you seem to have a good appriciation for poetry and all you just need a little bit of elevation.

[Soule]

Thankyou. Yes lol I am in need of elevation but I'm getting there I think

[Liquid Content]

You know you should tryout and tell them that i refered you. they would help you out in your path to elevation.

[Soule]

Who?

[Poeta Demonio]

3 poems open-closed.
Poeta.

You should know the rules by now dude. follow them. PS has very little rules, so it's not hard to abide by the few rules we have.