Death aroma is in the air
blackness fills the sky like spilt ink
lightning strikes
thunder rumbles the earth
snow is falling
screams of fear filll the city
baby's crying
dead bodies lie along the railroad tracks
water fill the corpse' and people called this day..
The Apocalypse
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-Poeta.
Last edited by Poeta Demonio; June 30th, 2006 at 01:18 AM
First of all you need two links
This piece was real basic the vocabulary that you used was elementarish you didnt show any emotion it seemed to me like you were just describing a scence from the movie the topic is real emotional so next time you do a topic like this be sure to add more lenght and emotion.
First off you don't need two links in poetry forum.
-Poeta. Let the mods do our jobs thank you.
Last edited by Poeta Demonio; June 30th, 2006 at 01:12 AM
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